I wrote much more than my 1000 words and had to delete about a third. But I am curious about the bizarre context provided by the organization of dueling women which has ensnared the two girls. Is the story part of a series? And I want to add that the photo is perfect. Please move it to the front.
This is an excellent work, one which I would rank among the best. I particularly enjoy stories which take their time and build to an incredible climax as does "Hunter". As long as it is--almost a novella--I stayed with it non-stop and was charmed by its heroines. It goes without saying (or criticism), that the translation (a brave and dedicated effort) needs minor re-working where colloquial English presents a problem, the primary pitfall in any translation or utterance in a foreign language, but you seem to have found already a volunteer for that task.
