Dear King,
That only depends on how realistic you want to make it in future sequels If they were my characters, I would strongly take into account, that their relationship is based on hatesex, that would eventually lead to a onesided or mutual violence, as it always does in real life. My aunt in her younger years was my etalon on how not to be in a relationship, she claimed the makeup sex to be amazing, but the truth is, my late uncle (not the one I wrote the M vs S stories about) was never a faithful one, and if he hadn't died young, he'd would have left her.
One minor typo is in your story, that's frankly inevitable with a length like this one, "Amber screamed at the cold water hitting her back, unable to keep her focus of pining the redhead". I'm plenty sure, as your actions describe, they also pine for the other, but I'm fairly certain you meant pinning instead.
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