Originally Posted by
apenman
I don't know what to say about this one, Kama. As usual, it was very well written with unexpected twists in the storyline. And, whether intentional or not (I believe intentional) you seem to prefer writing stories where the sex isn't the primary focus, but rather incidental to the story itself. I applaud this as it makes for a much better story, IMHO.
But the reason I mentioned my speechless state initially was that the story did not end like I was expecting it to end. I would guess that I won't be the only one to mention this...
Abra and Saskia were sentenced to a life that they clearly did not want. There was no safe escape, no happily ever after. That was the biggest twist of all. For me anyway.
BUT, your job as a writer is not to write for me or anyone else. It is to put your own ideas together, in your own style and hope your efforts will be understood and appreciated. Readers/non-writers may not understand the angst that the story teller feels when he/she posts a story that they've worked hard on and hope that said story will be liked.
Soo...even though it didn't end the way that I thought, I REALLY enjoyed this tale of two, desperate, love struck women whose ultimate fate may have been orchestrated by others, but still found love and comfort in each other's arms.
WELL DONE!!!
AP
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