Re: Tangle in Tuscany Part 2
Oooh, excellent stuff - even if you did cut the chapter off at the worst possible moment, lol! It's become something of a tradition now, I suppose... :cool: As a fan of both curvaceous women and wrestling, I really like the concept!
The characters' back stories are very good as well, as are their physical descriptions. Still, there is one tiny thing I'd love to see get more attention: comparisons. While Vanessa and Victoria apparently have very similar figures, it's probably safe to assume we'll be seeing lots of other match-ups in the future? As many of you know, I'm personally a complete sucker for variety, and would love to read about women of different heights, weights, body shapes, fitness levels and boob sizes/firmnesses facing off against each other. The short line about the Spanish brunette being perhaps a bit heavier was a very welcome mention, but what about their boobs!?! Roughly the same size, apparently, but are they identical in shape... or is one pair perhaps just a hint perkier, fuller, jigglier or more pendulous than the other? :p I want even more details, man!
Sorry to nitpick, but your story has so much promise and potential that I just can't help it! Some say that 'less is more', but for me, that doesn't apply to descriptions any more than it does to female curves, lol.
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Augur
Oooh, excellent stuff - even if you did cut the chapter off at the worst possible moment, lol! It's become something of a tradition now, I suppose... :cool: As a fan of both curvaceous women and wrestling, I really like the concept!
The characters' back stories are very good as well, as are their physical descriptions. Still, there is one tiny thing I'd love to see get more attention: comparisons. While Vanessa and Victoria apparently have very similar figures, it's probably safe to assume we'll be seeing lots of other match-ups in the future? As many of you know, I'm personally a complete sucker for variety, and would love to read about women of different heights, weights, body shapes, fitness levels and boob sizes/firmnesses facing off against each other. The short line about the Spanish brunette being perhaps a bit heavier was a very welcome mention, but what about their boobs!?! Roughly the same size, apparently, but are they identical in shape... or is one pair perhaps just a hint perkier, fuller, jigglier or more pendulous than the other? :p I want even more details, man!
Sorry to nitpick, but your story has so much promise and potential that I just can't help it! Some say that 'less is more', but for me, that doesn't apply to descriptions any more than it does to female curves, lol.
Hey Augs,
Glad you like the concept and stuff and you certainly make some interesting points about physical comparisons. Guess I'm leaving too much to your fevered imagination, huh? :D
Actually, thinking about it, the story is intended to go along with some artwork I've already commissioned so I may already be seeing more in my own mind's eye than a reading of the text makes possible. Hmmm... while I can't promise to get up to Augur levels of boob description we'll have to see what we can do in the next couple of episodes...
Rags
Re: Tangle in Tuscany Part 2
Rags my friend,
Listen, I don't want to sound like a complainer here, but allow me to grouse if I might.
Augur's very astute commentary here was almost as long as this entire chapter! Dammit man! I (and apparently so does Augur) need MORE! More screaming, angry women...more bras being torn off, more boobs colliding, more rollin' and rasslin' and, (dare I ask?) MORE WORDS!
Next thing I know, you'll be posting a 55 word chapter!!! I've written disclaimers longer than that! Think BIG man! The 20,000 word chapter IS out there and it's within your grasp! :cool: :)
Once again, NICE WORK!
A.P.
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Ragnar0k
Hey Augs,
Glad you like the concept and stuff and you certainly make some interesting points about physical comparisons. Guess I'm leaving too much to your fevered imagination, huh? :D
Actually, thinking about it, the story is intended to go along with some artwork I've already commissioned so I may already be seeing more in my own mind's eye than a reading of the text makes possible. Hmmm... while I can't promise to get up to Augur levels of boob description we'll have to see what we can do in the next couple of episodes...
Rags
Ah, well that makes sense! Having a photo/drawing as reference will of course make one less inclined to describe the characters in close detail - and lessen the reader's need for such descriptions. But please, do try to provide us with at least one or the other! ;)
And regarding Apenman's point, I can only agree wholeheartedly. Less is not more. In fact, you'll be shocked to find out that more is more. :cool:
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apenman
Rags my friend,
Listen, I don't want to sound like a complainer here, but allow me to grouse if I might.
Augur's very astute commentary here was almost as long as this entire chapter! Dammit man! I (and apparently so does Augur) need MORE! More screaming, angry women...more bras being torn off, more boobs colliding, more rollin' and rasslin' and, (dare I ask?) MORE WORDS!
Next thing I know, you'll be posting a 55 word chapter!!! I've written disclaimers longer than that! Think BIG man! The 20,000 word chapter IS out there and it's within your grasp! :cool: :)
Once again, NICE WORK!
A.P.
Gosh A.P. ,
Its real nice to know that eminent colleagues like Augs and your good self have got my back with this evolving little tale! ;)
Remarkably enough, a word count has revealed that BSQ (my maiden opus if you will) now weighs in at north of 90,000 words: that's enough to fill three novellas, or a 440 page novel. So, guess it could be argued that 'Rags the tortoise' gets there in the end, with plenty of boobs and other stuff colliding on the way! We'll see what can be done, but perhaps it just takes me more episodes than you pumped-up-on-steroids types, lol. ;)
R
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Augur
Ah, well that makes sense! Having a photo/drawing as reference will of course make one less inclined to describe the characters in close detail - and lessen the reader's need for such descriptions. But please, do try to provide us with at least one or the other! ;)
And regarding Apenman's point, I can only agree wholeheartedly. Less is not more. In fact, you'll be shocked to find out that more is more. :cool:
Well, now I feel kinda guilty about hoarding my reference images ;). They are viewable on my DA page as stated at the top of the post and HB supports such small file sizes that you lose a lot in translation but I'll put one or two in if the data limit allows...
Well the data limit wouldn't let me load so here's a link:
Amazons of Mars: Photo
Re: Tangle in Tuscany Part 2
DAMN RAGS
Big Breast collision and to be continued!
THAT'S COLD MAN!
Shak
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shak7
DAMN RAGS
Big Breast collision and to be continued!
THAT'S COLD MAN!
Shak
Shak, my man!
I know there are esteemed colleagues round these parts that seem to think I might have made a bit of a boob with the pacing of this serialisation, even made myself look like a bit of a tit perhaps?! But I'm jes' hopin', prayin' that if a bosom buddy like y'self can stay the distance there will be many happy MAMMARIES to come!
So, there's really no need to get too melon-choly or make mountains outa milk factories, Ragsy's got a handle on this stacked story - just wait and see!
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Ragnar0k
Shak, my man!
I know there are esteemed colleagues round these parts that seem to think I might have made a bit of a boob with the pacing of this serialisation, even made myself look like a bit of a tit perhaps?! But I'm jes' hopin', prayin' that if a bosom buddy like y'self can stay the distance there will be many happy MAMMARIES to come!
So, there's really no need to get too melon-choly or make mountains outa milk factories, Ragsy's got a handle on this stacked story - just wait and see!
THE MAN'S A POET, NOW EVERYBODY KNOW IT!!!
Point taken Rags......let the titillation continue!!!
Shak