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June 9th, 2002, 02:36 PM
#11
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I expected something like that to happen. For a 5 minute movie it might be ok. Well actually... for a 5 minute movie the movie needs to have the viewer act like a certain way. And this is a little cliche.
Also, make the conversations less 'book-like'.
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June 30th, 2002, 03:31 PM
#12
Inactive Member
I feel like you asking us what we think is a trick question. The most confusing elements of the script are:
"...your total is $xx.xx..."
and
"...(cashiers name here)..."
I can't help but think there's something fishy going on here.
Anyway, my reaction is that this is meant to be a simple story. The dialogue, the action described, the story - it's all simple. Pretty economic. Therefore, I don't think the characters need more dimension nor does the dialogue need more work. It is simple through and through which could make for a somewhat interesting short.
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