Please read my short script. Would love feedback!

[4score]

Okay....please give it a read and tell me what you think. My friend told me about how hard it is for him to break a dollar....so one evening, I wrote this script.

http://us.f1.yahoofs.com/users/e0c70...V9ZK.ASKHeoiLY

If that doesn't work, go to this location and view the file called "kobi1"

http://briefcase.yahoo.com/bc/auburn...ase.yahoo.com/

<font color="#a62a2a" size="1">[ January 18, 2003 01:23 PM: Message edited by: 4score ]</font>

[SoulJacker]

*pain* *anguish* *torment* self-loathing* *horses* *milk-gush* *denial* *optimism* *"stick it in my **** "*

Johnny Cash?

Respekt.

You deserve a Kitty:
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[pirate21]

Hey 4score, I read your short script. Very nice! I really enjoyed it. It was well thought out and cute. Who would think you could write about such a specific angle of Johnny's day! Keep 'em coming.

ps - Are you going to put this to film?

[4score]

Thanks. I haven't written many screenplays but I sure like to try! This one was fun because we all know the feeling.....when the amount is 1.02 and you have 2 dollars. It could totally be a Seinfield episode, ya know???? LOL

ChrisA

[Curtin-Parloe]

Fun. A little on the wordy side, but fun, nonetheless...

Paul