blue

[gollum]

this is from last year, one of the only things i wrote for creative writing class (instead of turning in something i'd already written--i know, i'm a terrible student sometimes), but i still really like it. this is one of the few pomes i've written that i have absolutely no idea where it came from. well except for the blue shirt. the rest of it, i mean.

blue

blue is the shirt
the shirt that you wore
like you wore your smile

in that restaurant
resting your hand
your hand on my knee
my need for you

almost too evident
evidence of my attachment
attached to the bill

with the fortune cookies

and my sex
sex being the reason
the reasoning behind blue
the blue of that shirt
that shirt that i love
more than my love

for you

-g

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Sometimes i think everyone on this board is crazy. The rest of the time i'm sure.
-Dan

[Branflakes]

I really like that one, gollum. Isn't it amazing where one thought can end up taking you?

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Branflakes, the ninja lesbian milk getter.
The one Necro calls "brain".
Call me what you want, just don't call me Blue Falcon. Wait! Nevermind! Just call me!
Your smell floats in my memory, long after you've gone.
"See that bright star up there? I know the girl who hung it there."

[gollum]

scary, ain't it?

this time out of one thought, i got two pomes. (it makes sense. really.) go figure.

*****
like clockwork you walk
out on me each night
ad midnight; never
looking back to notice the
look of pain and excitement
that hangs on my face like
a useless puppet, left behind
by the marionetteer,
lonely in a box
in the dark and listening
to the scuttle of mice feet
across dirty wooden floors.

*****
i left out the back door,
cutting through the kitchen
so i wouldn't have to face your face
one last time, but instead

i found you standing at the stove,
burning all of the letters
i ever wrote you.

-g

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Sometimes i think everyone on this board is crazy. The rest of the time i'm sure.
-Dan

[jones]

gollum, i love 'em all!

but i particularly like "like clockwork you walk." really like the puppet metaphor. would you mind terribly if i reprinted that one on the works & days site as a preludium to some future chapter?

take care

---jones

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[erisesoteric]

Gollum, I like it, I like it. I'm with jones on the clockwork walk, too. And the standing at the stove.

[Branflakes]

I like those, too, gollum.

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Branflakes, the ninja lesbian hair gel and milk getter.
The one Necro calls "brain".
Call me what you want, just don't call me Blue Falcon or Branni.
Until the time you come back to me like fate.
"See that star...the one shining brighter than all the others? I know the girl who hung it there."

[dwim]

gollum is just plain awesome the way she turn a phrase. now I owe her 2 milkshakes. I had one yesterday, with whipped cream ...
but that's something else entirely.
Carry on...

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There's loneliness in the radios...

[gollum]

jones-go ahead--sorry it took me so long to get back here to let you know. i'd be honored to find myself on works n days

everyone else-thanks i'm a big fan of imagery sometimes...

-g

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Sometimes i think everyone on this board is crazy. The rest of the time i'm sure.
-Dan