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    Cell phone where are you?

    I'm here, come closer, i'm ringing, answer me, touch me,
    come closer, i'm ringing.

    Cell phone please leave me alone, i need time alone.

    But i'm ringing, answer me, you need to answer me.
    Cell phone i need time alone. I need to look into myself, i need to find myself, just leave me alone.

    Beep, Beep, Beep,
    You have a message, look at it, someone wants to talk to you, answer me, touch me and tell me you love me.

    Cell phone i need time alone just leave me alone. I need to look into myself, i need to understand myself.

    A rush of anxiety fills his chest,
    his heart pumps faster, he can feel his chest thumping,
    tingles of lightning pulse throughout his body.

    Should i answer the phone? I don't want to but i do, i don't want to talk to anyone right now but i do, look at it, touch it, pick it up and call that person back, what happens if they really need my help or what happens if it's a girl that wants my body close to hers? Shit it's twelve what am i doing i should answer the phone.

    His body thumps, sweat pours down his forehead, you can smell it, you can smell his anxiety, his eyes move to the phone and back to the window and then back to the phone again. The battle between what he wants and what he needs carries on for hours.

    Answer me! Damn it! You know you can't live without me. Answer me!

    Eyes focused on phone,
    phone call,
    missed call,
    phone call,
    voice mail,
    hours pass,
    answer phone?

    He looks through his window and sees the world but all he can think about is:
    phone call,missed call,phone call,voice mail. The battle continues...

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    I want leave the reader hanging at the end. I actually read it and it dosen't leave you hanging. I need to fix the end but tell me what you think about it.

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    Short Story or poem? either way it's all good.

    Interesting... some peices of this didn't sit real well with me, but I'll elborate later.
    I'm on the way to the pool right now.
    Need somethin to beat this heat!

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    Make sure you do!

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