there ya go at the end.
"I stand above city and machine,
ready to add rhythm."
-that's an image. I like.
the rest is okay,
but the end is the beginning.
or just a good ending.
of course, that wouldn't be your thing, the end at the beginning.
you often start out small, and the end is bigger.
anyway, you're obviously working the words in this. so good work there.
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