Indiana

[Truth Alexander]

You wished me luck
Cuz you were gonna be away
So you wouldn't be able to see me play
And later on, that day
Call me up, and tell me I did good
And later on that night I could
Come over, and we'd hang out
Find things to talk and laugh about
As we lay in your beanbag chairs
Stairing up at the ceiling
I'd try to gather up the courage
To express to you my thoughts and feelings

You went away for the weekend
Leaving me here
Wondering when we'd be together again
Hurry up, get back fast
I'm not sure how much longer I can last

Spending time, by myself
Thinking of you, and nothing else
Stairing at a picture
Of us together, in a frame
Hoping soon, we can do the same
Waiting for time to pass
So we can be together again
But, until then
I'll do the only thing I can do
Sit here alone
And day dream of you

You went away for the weekend
Leaving me here
Wondering when, we'd be together again
Hurry up, get back fast
I'm not sure how much longer I can last


*Truth*
If I could be anything, anything at all........I'd be an angel, spread my wings and fly away

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Open the door to the Truth

[machinery]

I can be nothing but blantantly honest...


truth, this work seems no different from yr past work.
I say this to you 'cause for a long time I was stuck on the same subject....
broaden yr subjects....

they all seem like self-loathing-pop-punk lyrics....i am not sure if that is good...

you need to mix it up...
i hope you take this the right way


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"ashtray says you were up all night."

[sarafinamable]

i don't know much about your previous work, but i really like this. it is something prevalent in all of us.
i have to disagree with machinery. i don't think that in writing you can always just "switch" to different topics. writing is a form of expression and for a lot of people it is dealing with their own issues. i think that there is a reason if a person is stuck on one topic, i've noticed it in my own writing when read over work with a couple years spanning; i notice patterns and certain things that i get stuck on.
so now when i notice that i'm stuck on certain topics or styles of writing it helps me realize things about myself, whats going on in my life and why i can't switch my thinking. it would be pretty difficult. inspiration or creative thinking isn't exactly something that you can turn on or off or lay out like a math problem.
this is my opinion at least, but i certainly do not mean to offend anyone. so i apologize if i have.

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"this is life not heaven, you don't have to be perfect."
Gia
"Our love was comfortable and so broken in"
John Mayer
http://www.onemoredrink.moonfruit.com
First Name Basis is a great, little known band (so far), check out their website

[Hannibal]

I agree with you on the idea of not being able to lay it out like a math problem, or turn it on or off... but.. I also see Machinery's point, and have actually followed this same advice before.
I read my poetry from years gone by, and it was very different. But it was all the same, until I started bouncing ideas off of Machinery himself, and he told me to expand. It's not that you have to expand your writings, or your style, it's the idea behind it, that 'trying to' which will help. Not upfront are you going to willingly be able to say "i'm going to change my style today"...
but over time, I think that a person, who thinks about trying something different, will eventually slowly evolve into more, as long as they think they can, or someone tells them they should try.
Kind of like... it's in the back of your mind, and although it's not conciously affecting you, it IS affecting you in some small way, enough to change a little here, a little there.
Who knows you might like where you go with it, you might not, but at least then you know...

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As miserable as life may be I hold it pretty precious...

If I lose the light of the sun, I will write by candlelight, moonlight, no light. If I lose paper and ink, I wil write in blood on forgotten walls. I will write always, I will capture nights all over the world and bring them to you.
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[sarafinamable]

i see your point. it makes a little more sense the way you said it. thankyou.

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"this is life not heaven, you don't have to be perfect."
Gia
"Our love was comfortable and so broken in"
John Mayer
http://www.onemoredrink.moonfruit.com
First Name Basis is a great, little known band (so far), check out their website

[Generalkaos]

What Machinery said makes perfect sense to me. Yes you can make a conscious effort to change your style. There are all kinds of stylistic exercises and simple things to do to get your thinking into a different shape. Sometimes it's easy, sometimes it's hard--hell, it often amounts to changing what you're reading right then. And if you're stuck in a place, get unstuck. It's that simple. Maybe a process like freewriting and keeping a journal of starting lines can give you a different place to work from.

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Fetch me my blue fright wig, that I may be handsome when I unleash my wrath.

[sarafinamable]

thanks for the advice, but i like how it was explained before.

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"this is life not heaven, you don't have to be perfect."
Gia
"Our love was comfortable and so broken in"
John Mayer
http://www.onemoredrink.moonfruit.com
First Name Basis is a great, little known band (so far), check out their website