Naive

[Serenna]

This girl once wrote dreamily
about Enchanting Love
~sweet, pure, and naive~
(just how they like' em these days)
unaware that even innocent girls
get screwed
now she understands that even love
gets tainted by the world
that even she
gets touched by deception itself
and that blissfullness doesn't linger
too long
before misery arrives

[Hannibal]

For me, I enjoy ideas, as characters, events, players in a game if you will. I liked the way that poem kinda, well, I dont know, but it brought a little something with it that put the sting into a small wound that it created. Really kinda gave it a bite. Nice.

[parch]

you have such a nice rhythym ....it makes me actually repeatedly read the poem...over and over, to just feel the flow of the words... and your words are unpredictable .. which is what makes this poem good... i like this a lot.., please keep posting.
___---parch

[Serenna]

Thanks for replying. I like to know what people think, so just tell me straight out if anything sucks, okay? Thanks
-Serenna

[machinery]

You know...it's amazing.

I look at all your stuff and it's the same subject. It's really neat because your emphasis is the complete opposite of mine...its like we are dealing with the same problems. I look at your writing as an answer to mine. That's why I really take to it. Not that it makes me happy, but makes me think of what I have done. That's how it gets to me.

Please keep it up.