trouble

[Hannibal]

Color sun blindness,
Bondage post of boink,
built by those of a poignant God.
Left of the middle and eight to the right,
Bleeding cars make small families,
Tremble, bend, and blow with fear,
The smile of the sun needing their,
Overblown eyes.
Transcending ideas conjure images,
Of nothing.

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[Hannibal]

Any thoughts on this? Since it went to page 2 because many people post about 30 poems at a time and flood the boards Just looking for thoughts on this one...

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[rose]

what is boink???

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[machinery]

well...i really don't know what to say...

lots of images in this one...I actually liked how you mentioned God in this one, i know it's weird that I say that..but oh well...and damn, let me point out that these bio lab computers suck ass...ok

I was transfixed by this line:

"Left of the middle and eight to the right,
Bleeding cars make small families,"

but I am not sure as to what it means...

give me some background on this pome...I can't get the full idea..only a slide show of images....



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[machinery]

oh, and I also agree with the mad posting...I think I did it once a couple of weeks ago...and it's just not rite....it pushes other posts down...and it's just monotous to read a works by a reader continously....I think we need to spread our work out..instead of posting one after another...maybe one to two at a time would be nice...that way...we can have some nice discussions...that's what I want... I want a discussion board with this as well...you know....yass yass...let's talk about and rip apart these pomes! Yass!

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[Hannibal]

Yea, i'd just like people to post a little more conciously. Not saying poetry is bad, but come on, a couple at a time... so we can analyze... as for this one, I just blurbed. That's all I can say, I just spit out what came into my head, let it fly so to speak. So I guess a slideshow really is what it was.

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