Estranged

[Hannibal]

I dont know if I feel more comfortable,
In the idea of her coming, or her going.

She does both you know,
the coming and going.

She comes to me in my dreams,
but only the sweetest of them-
never anything less.

She goes with the morning sunlight,
which works it's way through the house-
down the stairs into my eyes.

Throughout the day she lays upon my mind,
like the sun upon the world-
a thick blanket of incessant beatings.

The sun beating down against the world,
Over and over, telling us that it-
Is there - is alive.

As she beats down against my skull,
reminding me how she could be,
how she is - alive.

Life spins around me every day,
As reality begins to mirror my dreams,
And she manifests herself in my arms -
time and time again, night after night.

She lays upon me, as I do upon her,
with but a whisper we profess our love,
the evening churning away with silence -
animals alive with sound.

She is my reality, as much as I am hers,
And we see each other daily -
if but only one dream at a time.

[SHATOUSHKA]

*copy.....paste*

[Hannibal]

i dont know if i feel more comfortable
in the idea of her coming or her going.
she does both, you know
...the coming and going...

she comes to me in my dreams
(but only the sweetest of them)
never anything less

she goes with the morning sunlight
which works it's way through the house
down the stairs into my eyes

throughout the day she lays upon my mind
like the sun upon a child
...a thick blanket of incessant beatings...

the sun beating down against the world
over and over
telling us that it is -- alive

as she beats down against my skull
reminding me how she could be
how she is -- alive

life spins around me every day
as reality begins to mirror my dreams
(she manifests herself in my arms)
time and time again, night after night

she lays upon me, as i do upon her
(with a whisper we profess our love)
an evening churning away with silence
the animal is -- alive


she is my reality, as much as I am hers
we see each other daily
if only one dream at a time

--- A friend made these differences within the poem. She asked to remain nameless *cough - shatzy - cough*
Lemme know what you guys think... I like 'em

[SHATOUSHKA]

<font size=30>ASS!!!!</font>

[SHATOUSHKA]

too bad the format is all ganked
it looks better in the email

[rose]

i dont understand the parenthesis in the last couple stanzas. i dont think that they serve much purpose. i do however understand the set in the 2nd. i dontknow its hard to read on group and then go down and compare when they are alike.

dont know if this helped...but i tried..
~A~

[SHATOUSHKA]

each set of parenthesis was meant to
represent thought within the context
of the thought...

such as one would do as they were
reading a passage and imagining something
to go along with it.

good Q, rose