Acquaintance

[Kalyope]

Blank eyes survey my face
for familiarity and your brow furrows
in depsperate concentration, but the memory
cannot be wrestled free.

You remember me less
every time I come to see you.
Our visits now begin with introductions
instead of loving recognition.


I want to add more to this....just don't know what direction I'm going to take it in. Lemme know what you think.

[Hannibal]

I can definately see where you could build a lot on this...
and I certainly find it a peice worthy of building on..

however - I also like it just as is.. short - and to the point (in my opinion..)

I just think the whole thing is really really solid 'as is'... to me the words are a perfect fit, and the image is strikingly clear. I love this... the more I read it - the more I like it.

If you add more, be sure and post it up... I'm into it.