Oooh, excellent stuff - even if you did cut the chapter off at the worst possible moment, lol! It's become something of a tradition now, I suppose...
As a fan of both curvaceous women
and wrestling, I really like the concept!
The characters' back stories are very good as well, as are their physical descriptions. Still, there is one tiny thing I'd love to see get more attention: comparisons. While Vanessa and Victoria apparently have very similar figures, it's probably safe to assume we'll be seeing lots of other match-ups in the future? As many of you know, I'm personally a complete sucker for variety, and would love to read about women of different heights, weights, body shapes, fitness levels and boob sizes/firmnesses facing off against each other. The short line about the Spanish brunette being perhaps a bit heavier was a very welcome mention, but what about their boobs!?! Roughly the same size, apparently, but are they identical in shape... or is one pair perhaps just a hint perkier, fuller, jigglier or more pendulous than the other?
I want even more details, man!
Sorry to nitpick, but your story has so much promise and potential that I just can't help it! Some say that 'less is more', but for me, that doesn't apply to descriptions any more than it does to female curves, lol.
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