Again, much appreciated the nice feedback you are giving me!
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Again, much appreciated the nice feedback you are giving me!
Was rooting for the Valk though I couldn't get overmuch into the action itself. One could also argue that you left a lot of room for a sequel.
Not the ending I was expecting. With all the shit talking and how arrogant these two were. I figured who ever loses would be broken and humiliated with the winner literally rubbing it in with sadistic glee.
That or a draw where they realize the other is the best sex they've ever had.
But with this the door is wiiide open for sequels. Between the "cheating", the whole "I've decide I won so I'm leaving" bit at the end, the two red head friends going at it. so much fun you can have with this. Man I can already see the "debate" between these two on why the consequences of the loser went out the window with the "cheating" ^^. Between this, your Maid War<what i really want a sequel for, or side story with the red head maids> and that Combustion story from a while back. Whatever you do next I know I'll enjoy.
Also the girl who owned the house and the redhead in the photos there. Was that Morton easteregg? Can't remember the title of the story but remember it was Karen and a black girl going at it all over a college.
Well seen! Yes, there is an easter egg from Morton's story "Self Defence". Alisha Jackson is Karen Miller's rival in that story. I like to include little easter eggs :)
Thanks for the nice comments to everyone!
Excellent !! I liked it very much ! You are one of the better writers here !
Hot erotic scenes, plot, well written...
YOU KNOW to write. As a not native English speaker, like you, i admire your perfect English as well.
I agree with a comment that you left a door open... for a continuatioon of this saga...
A wide open door, i dare to say !! LOL
I liked that too !!
The assfight is good!