Feedback and Thoughts

[moanalo]

A big thank you to everyone who took the time to read ‘On the Court’, and
‘Off the Court’.

Every ‘like’ and comment is very much appreciated.
Do not take my lack of a response as an insult. It is very difficult for me
to stay ‘on task’ and so I must stay focused. Post something. Then log off
and walk away for a long break.

Some interesting facts about this story...
*The original story was never expected to be this long, about 50% shorter
in its original format. It was a very ‘plot’ driven story. But as time went
on, the story become more character-driven, which can significantly
increase the length. And it did.
(See George R.R. Martin and Game of Thrones for an example. He talks
extensively how he expanded the characters at great length, causing his
books to swell in size. In some cases, the plot for ‘GoT’ had to be
significantly altered to accommodate the evolving characters.)

*This is not my normal writing style. But to write from Annika’s point of
view, I had to adopt a somewhat spastic, rapid-style of thinking/writing,
because that is how the character Annika thinks and functions.

*I feel there is one more chapter to write, it is elusive, but the ideas
are coming. There is also likely to be another major change; I am seriously
considering that the final chapter will be told from Monique’s perspective.
And, since Breast-fighting and Sex-fighting are a central theme to this
site, that is what I will focus on. The final chapter will finally be ‘that
epic battle’ between those two fine young women. And it will be epic.
I do not want to give away anymore.

...now, just to write the damn thing.

PS.
I have several other stories that fit into this genre, and will post them
when time permits.

[spartwow]

I knew this couldn’t have been your first story. I’d love to see your other works when you get the time.

[sexyvalquiria44]

I was day by day, attentive to the page for your great series, very interested in seeing what else you bring

[Eights]

Story was a blast from start to finish ,well more is planned so not really a finish yet.

Last chapter was so damn cute, that's not something I usually find myself saying with this genre. The 180 from violence to tripping over themselves and each other to successfully address the elephant in the room was amazing.

Looking forward to whatever comes next.

[Austin315]

Just found this story and WOW!! Instant favorite. Love the emphasis on muscle and all of the body to body struggle for supremacy. Wonderfully written as well. Would absolutely love to read your other stories. Thank you for this amazing contribution.