Hot story!
Great One
Please Continue Love Your Stories..
Hot story!
Lotus,
Very good story, I loved the detail and the description of the fighters... especially with them being somewhat identical and the whole symmetrical aspect. The titfight was very detailed and loved the "weird fight" of them grabbing each others nipples as a weapon against their own.
A sexfight would have finished this off quite well, but I see you wrote this as a titfight only which is fine!
Keep up the aggression and hate for the combatants.. it adds to the fight.
Thank you for the comment and feedback! I have struggled with trying to express aggression and hate between the fighters in the past, and that was something I was trying to improve on in this story, keeping it as pure hate rather than it giving way to a more nuanced relationship. This is something I hope to further work on in Bully vs Bully, getting better than expressing the pure malice and spite between women.
Thank you again, having so much helpful feedback has been fantastic, being able to know what people like in stories is great, and having an idea of how to improve is even better
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