The story is very well written, I like how it starts with the ending, already setting up the final scenario of Megan and Kate vs. Holly and Kelsie.
Also the idea of each chapter to present how each woman joins this world of sexual fights, seems super original to me. Although if there is something wrong in my opinion, it is that you did not dare to do the character descriptions. I understand that you solved it by adding the information of the real models, but I don't think it's enough support.
It reminds me for example of Angeldawn who made 3D models of his characters, but still gave them details to give us a vision of them.
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