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I won't let it go the way that you were
just laying there
you hadn't said a word to me in some
30 minutes
the conversation completely
one sided
now silent
I guess I couldn't be mad at you for being
so quiet
It wasn't like you were being your usual
anger inducing
self
Like you had been just an hour
ago.
I suppose that is why it wasn't hard to
walk away
And leave you there
A mosaic of mosquito bites
amongst the forest floor.
Would anyone miss
you
I certainly know that I
won't.
let me gut this first.
I won't let it go.
you were
just laying there
you hadn't said a word
in minutes,
our dialogue now done.
I couldn't be mad at you,
being so quiet.
It wasn't like your usual self,
angered, induced...
Like you had been
just an hour ago.
it wasn't hard to
walk away
And leave you there,
A mosaic of mosquito bites
amongst the forest floor.
Would anyone miss
you
I certainly know that I
won't.
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the end is difficult for me because i love these lines:
"A mosaic of mosquito bites
amongst the forest floor."
after that, you really need to come with a bang, simply because that previous line(s) protrudes from the rest of the poem.
It could possibly be that line is written more poetically than the rest of it. If you could work that into the rest of the poem....WATCH OUT!
is this murder or found/left homicide?
HMMM.
I want to hear your thoughts first.