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its good, i liked it
i didnt understand however why he starts running after his encounter at the bar. He seems either really laid back or an emotional wreck, both of which wouldnt suggest running to me.
Have i missed the piont?
Hey guys, this is my first post to this board.
I like the set up with the V.O. And I understand why you would have the V.O over black but could the bar serve the same purpose?
What I mean with the V.O is do a montage of specific images such as the street,teenagers, exterior of the bar with the camera slowly working its way up to Anthony. Final shot is a C.U of Anthony's face (which is a great visual btw [img]biggrin.gif[/img] ) with the line "I've had enough".
Just constructive criticism, don't take it any other way. I love the premise and it has the potential to be a great thriller!
Paul Macomber [img]graemlins/thumbs_up.gif[/img]
I like it. The beginning reminds me of the intro to Spiderman.
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20 minutes of opening credits?
Did he pay money to kill himself?
I would watch more yes.
Redlum, no where all we hear is him talking,
"If you thought I was an odinary kid..."
Hey there.
"Did he pay money to kill himself?"
Yup.
Despin out.
Very nice work Desp. You've improved a hel of a lot over the years. Thats a cool setup.
Great intro. VO worked really well. Have you ever tried to sell one of these?
Hey Despin,
This is my first post. I liked your script! There's one thing I don't understand: why does Anthony have a wad of cash in his pocket?
Hi everyone, I'm also new here(it's getting boring huh? [img]smile.gif[/img] )
Anyway, the script is good, it reminds me of a book I read sometimes ago, it was also about a guy who pays somebody to kill him. He was a retired professional serial killer, who got sick of his life. He putted a price on his own head for all other serial killers.(he had the reputation of being the best) But during the first attempt or just before, he changes his mind and realises he wants to live. That moment, a race against the clock starts. It was quite a good book, but I can't recall the title.