Mountain top feeling

Mountain top green
Slice of a dream,

I wondered about you there,
sitting up on top of that mountain as a child,

dreamt of how you'd look,
Like the sky I watched unfold before me
the clouds dancing with one another,
forming shapes that resembled my youthfull exuberance.
you took shape in my mind,
just as the clouds of my reality.

Unable to move
perplexed by the view of the shadows upon the ground,
as if imprinting themselves forever
thick, rich, green grass, mottled with tall stale weeds,
absorbing every shadow from every cloud,
making the earth beneath me,
as interesting as the clouds above,
all the while I formed my dreams of you.

Boyish dreams of marriage made upon that sweet top,
A mountain to a boy,
An inconvienence to a man.
A dream of a boy,
of a hopefull reality as a man.

Thoughts of home shook my brain free,
as ideas of an ideal partner faded off into the distance,
taking with them, the clouds,
all in unison they folded off to the horizon,
Dancing and weaving their happy way,
as a boys feet began the tedious journey,
Home for dinner,
from a spot up on a mountain.

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shit yea man! it seem like every word had a purpose in this...i've read it twice and i can find nothing but solid work. that's all i have to say.

but a question...because questions are one of the best inventions in the world....

do you revise much or are these mind blops that just come out?

get back to me..

This poem reminds me of one of my favorite places, near my cabin in North Carolina. It's on the Blue Ridge Parkway, its called The Lump. It's a big grassy hill sticking out high from the mountain chain, with a panaramic view. One can see forever over the foothills.

I take my telescope up there on cold clear night.
I take my laptop there when I want to be alont to write.

G. Arthur Woods
WWW.ReadersNet.net

These are just mind blops really
I dont know what I think when I write, i just let them plop out.
Mind plops... haha
i like that..
There's a poetry contest here at school, and a short story contest, think this could be a possible entrant?
it's 15 poems and 1 short story
well, up to 15 poems.... I think i have that many to submit.. just don't knwo what oens... *shrugs*

tree's, limbs, and leafs,

dammit tuna, why didn't you think up cool names like that for our board???

i guess we just aren't as cool as these poetry-loving-fucks.

That's nice that you guys have a sounding board for your writing. But unless you have real shit to say to us, stay out of our message board!

whoa, hanny... that poem makes me wanna break
out with some john denver... FOR SHAME!!!! jk

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><table border="0" width="90%" bgcolor="#333333" cellspacing="1" cellpadding="0"><tr><td width="100%"><table border="0" width="100%" cellspacing="0" cellpadding="2" bgcolor="#FF9900"><tr><td width="100%" bgcolor="#DDDDDD"><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif"><font color=#000000>Originally posted by Fuck Poetry:
There haven't been any good poets in two centuries for a reason, poetry is fucking DEAD.</font></font></td></tr></table></td></tr></table></BLOCKQUOTE>

2 centries???

wallace stevens, stephen benet, dorothy parker,
ts eliot, david ignatow, robert frost, langston
hughes, theodore roethke, and may swenson are
not good poets??? [img]confused.gif[/img]

I like them!
good poets, good poets.
bad posters, good poets!
Bad other board posters can't take a joke!

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><table border="0" width="90%" bgcolor="#333333" cellspacing="1" cellpadding="0"><tr><td width="100%"><table border="0" width="100%" cellspacing="0" cellpadding="2" bgcolor="#FF9900"><tr><td width="100%" bgcolor="#DDDDDD"><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by shatzy:
robert frost, langston
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My apologies, sliped my mind in my haste. The rest are too self involved and far too consumed with being "poets" (like some others here) to actually write something of any worth.

By the way Shatzy, cool avatar.

<font color="#a62a2a" size="1">[ March 03, 2003 11:55 PM: Message edited by: Fuck Poetry ]</font>

gotcha [img]graemlins/thumbs_up.gif[/img]

and i dig your avatar [img]cool.gif[/img]

Most kind.

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><table border="0" width="90%" bgcolor="#333333" cellspacing="1" cellpadding="0"><tr><td width="100%"><table border="0" width="100%" cellspacing="0" cellpadding="2" bgcolor="#FF9900"><tr><td width="100%" bgcolor="#DDDDDD"><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Fuck Poetry:
<font color=#000000>The rest are too self involved and far too consumed with being "poets" (like some others here) to actually write something of any worth.</font>
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i find this interesting. i, too, think that when
i read some of the works. its almost as if you
can smell the subliminal narcissism....

i do dig may swenson... but as you have said,
there are times that i read her pieces and think
that because she got complimented on a piece,
she should repeat the same measure.
her work is a bit repetitive in style.

*ding ding ding* WE HAVE A WINNER!

All good works of literature,and more recently film and music, come from a feeling or idea that the author has, not the feeling that the author is trying to evoke. Not too much of the good stuff around. But what would I know? Just some dimwitted moron who will now return to his regularly scheduled message board.

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><table border="0" width="90%" bgcolor="#333333" cellspacing="1" cellpadding="0"><tr><td width="100%"><table border="0" width="100%" cellspacing="0" cellpadding="2" bgcolor="#FF9900"><tr><td width="100%" bgcolor="#DDDDDD"><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Fuck Poetry:
<font color=#000000>*ding ding ding* WE HAVE A WINNER!</font>

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whoa! thats my line as well [img]tongue.gif[/img]


come back soon! [img]smile.gif[/img]

[QUOTE]Originally posted by Fuck Poetry:
All good works of literature,and more recently film and music, come from a feeling or idea that the author has, not the feeling that the author is trying to evoke.


DAVE! SHUT THE FUCK UP AND GO HOME! WHAT IN THE HELL ARE YOU DOING, PUSSY!

I liked this piece. I can't pin down exactly what about it makes it read so well. Maybe it's just me. But good work.

Hey you lunie bastard,
great to see you back.
I know you've got work, so post that shit up!

Just remember that you asked me to when you start to regret it. [img]wink.gif[/img]

I've no idea what some of the exchanges above are about, but I like some of the images in this piece.