{MAT} More fanfic.

Okay, I started writing a Nightcrawler fanfic and thought I would share it with you guys to get some imput on it. I've got three pages, this is the first two. No title yet, 'cause I haven't thought of one. Ideas and CONSTRUCTIVE critisim (sp?) are welcome. I use some Japanese in here, so I'll put the translations up here.

Hai= yes
Ja Ne= Good bye
Neko= cat
Koneko-hime= Kitten Princess
Nani Kori= what is it (not sure it I spelled that right, I'll have to look.)

If I missed any spelling mistakes I'm sorry. Any thing in * is telepathic talking.

Kurt watched out the window. A new student was coming today. What was her name again? *Rei. Rei Neko.* said Jean. "Danke Jean." said Kurt. "Hope she gets here soon. A new face would be nice." said Kurt as he left the window.
A car drove up. "We're here." said Rei's mom. "Kay." Rei and her mother got out of the car. Rei swept a lock of black waist length hair back. Her eyes were slitted like a cat's and were yellow. Around her eyes and curling around her cheek and forehead, like Lilandra's markings, was black shiny fur. The only outer appearance of her mutation. The fur showed up against her tan skin. Jean stepped out and walked towards them. "Hello Mrs. Neko. Rei. Welcome to Xaiver's School for the Gifted." "Hello. Are you Jean Grey?" said Rei. Jean nodded. "I'm Rei." Her mom handed her her bags. "Don't worry Koneko-hime. You'll learn how to control your power." Her mom whispered, as she hugged her goodbye. "Ja Ne." said Rei. Her mom drove away. "For the sake of Mina, I hope you're right." Rei said, her eyes filling with tears. "Come on. I'll show you in." said Jean. *Rogue, come and help with Rei's stuff.* Rogue came and the three carried Rei's things into the main hall. When they got inside, Jean telekinetically scooped up Rei's bags from her. "Are you sure you don't need help?" asked Rei. "Nah. Come on. We'll show you to your room." said Rogue. They started walking up the stairs, Rei in the lead.
The two were telling Rei about the school, when Kurt rounded the corner at the top of the stairs. Rei was facing Jean, asking a question and walked right into Kurt. She let out a startled yelp and started to back up, not realizing that she was still on the stairs. Her left heel slipped off the stair and she started to fall backwards. Kurt grabbed her hand and pulled her forward, hard. Rei stumbled into him and her lips brushed his neck. Kurt felt a tingle run though him. "Mien Gott, she's beautiful." He thought. "Are you all right fraulein?" he asked, his arms tightening around her waist. Rei blushed slightly. "Hai. Yes. I'm sorry. I didn't mean to stumble into you." Rei stared at him. "He's handsome. Such soft blue fur." she thought. "Rei, this is Kurt Wagner. Kurt, this is Rei Neko." said Rogue. "Hi." said Rei. "Hello." Kurt replied. "What does neko mean?" he asked. "It's Japanese, it means cat." "Yeah. And now that you've been introduced, can you kindly unwrap yourself from her, Kurt?" Jean asked. Without seeing it, Kurt's tail had wrapped itself around Rei's waist and down her leg. The tip of the tail was gently rubbing against her left kneecap. They looked down. "Oh. Sorry." Kurt said. "That's okay." said Rei, as she gently untangled herself. "Don't pay any attention to him sugar. He flirts with all the girls." said Rouge. "And I thought I was something special." said Rei. "You most certainly are." said Kurt, as he kissed Rei's hand. "Are you done?" Jean demanded. "Nope." said Kurt. The two other women sighed and told Rei that they would put her stuff in her room and come back and get her. Rei smiled and told them to take their time. Rei and Kurt were mid-flirt when the Professor called. * Nightcrawler, it's time for your training in the Danger Room.* "Nightcrawler? I thought your name was-" "Nightcrawler is my codename. I have to go. I'll see you at dinner ja?" "Hai. Ja Ne Kurt." Kurt smiled, kissed her hand and 'ported to the Danger Room. "You're Rei right? I'm Kitty." Rei smiled at her. Rei was 5" 8' so Kitty was 2 inches shorter then her. "I'm Rei, nice name by the way." Kitty thanked her and told her that Jean had asked her to show Rei to her room. "So what's your power?" asked Kitty. "I like your eyes, very pretty." "Thank you." Rei whispered, her voice cracking slightly. Kitty wondered if she said something Wrong and was about to ask when Rei cleared her throat and said. "I can shape shift into a black panther. My eyes are the only visible sign of my mutation, but sometimes my teeth turn into fangs." Kitty told her that she could phase her body through any object. "Cool. Handy power." said Rei. They came to Rei's room. On the way they met Rhane and Jubilee. "Here it is." said Kitty. "We'll come get you for dinner." said Jubilee. "Nice to meet ya." Rhane said. "You too." Rei said, as she walked into her room. After an hour of unpacking and the beginnings of decorating, there was a knock at the door. "Nani kori?" she asked as she opened the door. "It's us. What did you just say?" asked Jubilee. "It's Japanese for what is it." Rhane said dinner was ready and they went downstairs. They were talking about various other people at the school when Kurt came up behind them. "So how do you like it so far?" he asked, as his tail danced around her, rubbing against her neck. "It's okay." She wrapped Kurt's tail around her hand and gently bit the tip. "If I didn't know any better Kurt, I'd say that your tail is trying to seduce me." She grinned and rubbed her cheek against his tail. Kurt blushed. "Sorry. I think it has a mind of it's own" "Maybe it likes me." Rei whispered back, winking. Kurt swallowed. "Dinner guys." Said Jubilee. "Right." Said Rei. The three left for dinner and left Kurt in the hall.

I like it. Very sexy. Rei reminds me of those characters in that Cats broadway show. Will they do the Mongojerry and Rumpleteezer number? http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/wink.gif Is this the comicbook Kurt or the Evolution one? He seems kinda young, but older that the Evo one. I do think you need to put in more details, like what Kurt and Rei are thinking when they meet. I think she should have been surprised to see him port. And maybe he takes note of her eyes and fur, and sees a similarity with himself. Also the other characters don't sound like themselves. Jean, Rogue and Kitty seem pretty much alike. I think you could just leave most of them out. In fact if its the Evolution reality, maybe you could have just Storm and the Prof, and they have these two randy teens to keep an eye on. There could be some comedy in that.



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CATS is my other obsession in life. Rei is kinda a combo of me and my Cats charater. I have a site for it if you wanna go look. http://www.MoonbeamDancer.homestead.com It's the comic Kurt.(Curly hair and all.) It's been 7 or so years since I've writen any X-MEN fanfic, so if it seems kinda bleh in some spots that most likely why. I'm a little rusty so bear with me please. This is not the final copy, so things might change a bit. I'll put the 3rd page up soon.

Okay, here is the rest of what I have writen. It's a little adult, so if you don't like that sort of thing, don't read it. It's not to bad, just gining you fair warning. Enjoy

Jubilee laughed softly. "You're driving him nuts. I think he likes you." "Notice that you're flirtin' like crazy with the new girl." said Remy. "Ja. She's mine Remy." Kurt growled. Kurt really liked Rei and the last thing he needed was Remy's interfering. This was his hunt and his alone. Remy raised his hands. "Hey, she's all yours man." Kurt smiled. "Good." Let the hunt begin.
It had been three months since Rei had come. She and Kurt had spent all of it flirting, coming onto and joking with each other. Case in point this morning when they were washing out the syrup containers. "Kurt Wagner! If you splash me with any more water, I'm gonna pour syrup all over you." Kurt grinned evilly. "Is that a promise liebling?" he whispered, as he splashed her. Rei yelped and turned so the water splashed onto the side of her face and ran down her neck. "Here, let me help." He said, as he licked the water off her face and worked his way down her neck. Rei gasped sharply and closed her eyes. Kurt gently sucked the drops off her earlobe. "Do you want me to stop?" he hissed in a warm puff of air against her ear. "If you stop, I swear I'll kill you." She growled. Kurt smiled. "I thought so." he said, as he kissed her. He sat her on the counter and Rei wrapped her legs and arms around him. Kurt Gently nibbled on and ran his tongue along her lower lip. He slipped his tongue in her mouth and it tasted just like she thought it would. Warm and sweet like honey. She purred in response and ran her tongue against his fangs. He growled in pleasure. She reluctantly broke the kiss off and breathed in. "Wow." "I take it you liked it libeling?" Rei nodded. "You splashed me again." She picked up the syrup and dipped her fingers into it. She smeared it onto Kurt's face. "Hey!" he yelped. She grinned. "I should make you lick it off me." he said. "Don't mind if I do." Rei said. She leaned close and licked off the syrup with her sandpapery tongue. She let her tongue go back to normal and gave him a push out of the way and got off of the counter. "You can finish the dishes." she said, as he started after her as she walked out of the kitchen. Kurt watched her leave and laughed to himself.

WOOHOOO!

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Darn! Hey MoonbeamDancer, I checked out your site. Really awsome! I signed the guestbook and messed up my url! Can you fix it for me? here it is : http://www.geocities.com/amyf22204/C...ulinary_x.html

I have so much trouble with it.

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YOU SIGNED THE BOOK??? 8) Oh, that makes me so happy!! Yeah, I'll try and fix it for ya. Okay, now ideas on my story. Please help I am stuck. If anyone comes up with a title I will love you forever. Now I wanna write a part where it involves the two of them, and a bottle of honey in a dream. (A spin off of what happened in the kitchen but better.)But I kinda need help leading up to it would be it. If you help with that, I WILL love you forever I swear, you'll even get thanked in the author's notes of the final copy, same goes with the title. I'll post the final copy up here when it's done if any one wants me too.

Okay, here's some more. I still have more to type up so I'll get that on here ASAP.

Rei walked down the hall. She opened the door to her room and went inside. She went to her closet; pulled out her uniform and changed into it Her uniform was black and had a v-neck. The gloves and boots were like Phoenix's and were a metallic blue except the fingers of the gloves were still black. She walked downstairs and rode the elevator down to the Danger Room. She walked into the room. "Ready Rei?" asked Jean. Rei silently nodded, her mind still on her kiss with Kurt. She half realized that the room had come alive around her. Rei shifted to her cat/human form. "And you still get a kick out of it." A voice growled in her head. "After what you did when your powers manifested, you still like it!!" "Shut up!! That wasn't my fault! It was an accident!!" Rei screamed in her head. "It wasn't my fault." She whispered aloud. She pushed her problems to the back of her head and climbed up onto a ledge to see the landscape that Jean had made. The room was rocky and craggy. It had trees, ledges, and rock formations. It looked like the Savage Land. Perfect for a cat to climb around in.

I've got more writen down on paper, but haven't typed it into my computer yet. More soon.

Well, I'll have what kitty-cat-girl is having! Mary Sues can be good for the libido!

So, she has some deep, dark secret, heh? Good. A little angst is good for the libido too. I dunno about the honey in his fur though...I think she'd get hairballs! Not good for the libido.

Seriously, I like it. It has potential...we need a little heat around here. Though the guys might disagree... http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif

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Okay, here is the rest. I'll write more soon.

She saw a ledge up and across from her and jumped up to it. She grabbed the edge with her claws and clawed her way onto it. Since she now had a higher vantage point, she looked around quickly and sniffed. Nothing unusual. Yet. She heard a screech over her shoulder and looked. A pterodactyl swooped down on her. Rei jumped off and changed completely into her panther form, with a slight popping of bone and muscle. For the next two hours Rei hunted and was hunted. Dinosaurs, Sentinels, you name it, Rei fought it. Two hours later, Rei shifted to her normal form and slowly walked back upstairs. All her muscles hurt. And since she was a shape shifter, she had a lot of muscles that hurt. "Oh, ow. I need a hot bath." Rei thought as she walked down the hall to her room. "Or maybe a massage." she mumbled. "Did you say something libeling?" Rei jerked her head up and winced as her neck muscles screamed at her. "Hey Fuzzy Elf. I just need a massage and maybe a hot bath. I just got back from the Danger Room and everything hurts." Kurt nodded in sympathy. "I have a tube of Icy Hot, I'll rub some into your back" Rei smiled. "Okay." "I'll meet you in your room." said Kurt. Rei went into her room, sat on the bed and removed her gloves and boots. Kurt knocked on the door. "Come in." said Rei. Kurt came in and shut the door behind him. "Take off your shirt and lay on the bed." " I knew it. You just wanna get me out of my clothes." Rei joked. "Kurt grinned. "As tempting as the idea is, not now." Rei sighed, took off the top of her uniform so it was around her waist and laid down.

A massage from Fuzzy Elf. Man, I'd kill for that. More soon. http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif

Send ideas PLEASE I'm stuck. I know what I'm gonna write, but it's not coming at the moment. I'll have to think on all of this.....

Wow, I wrote more tonight. Enjoy.

Kurt sat the tube of Icy Hot and the nightstand and picked up the hair clip that Rei kept there. It was gold colored and the size of Kurt's hand. Kurt wound Rei's hair into a coil and pinned it with the clip to the top of her head. He squeezed some of the Icy Hot onto his hand and started to rub it into Rei's shoulders. Rei flinched and growled in pain. "You're rubbing too hard." she hissed. "Sorry." Kurt loosened his grip and continued with the massage. He quietly rubbed her shoulders and her neck until they were jelly and worked his way down. "Mmmm?Better." Rei literally purred. Kurt smiled, enjoying the way she turned to butter in his hands. He got to the middle of her back and rubbed a little harder, running his knuckles up and down her spine. Rei purred louder and closed her eyes in ecstasy. Kurt stopped slightly. Rei opened her eyes slightly. "Were you purring?" he asked. Rei smiled. "Yeah. Why? Does it bother you?" Rei asked, wriggling under his hands so he'd continue rubbing her back. "No. Strangely enough, I like it." he replied, returning to the massage.

So should I continue the massage, or move on the dream? I was thinking of having Kurt lick the honey off of her. http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif I was thinking of doing it from Rei's POV (because it's easier for me to write girls then guys.) but I could try from Kurt's POV.

Make you a deal, Moonie...send me whatever you write from Rei POV and I'll write the same events from Kurt's. I write better from a guy's POV.

YOU'D DO THAT???? AWWW You're soooo sweet!!! Thank you! http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif I'll write it as soon as I can. 'cause right know I can't think, but it'll be soon.

ahem...is it getting...warm in here?

Go for the tag-team special guys!

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So I take it I should start the dream? Or do you guys want me to continue the massage a little longer?

Oh yeah, Slart, I forgot to ask. How is your fanfic coming along?

I'll get something up by the end of the week, I'm sure.

Okay, I've got some of the dream writen. I need to type it into my computer and write some more of it.... Any ideas on how the dream should go?

This is off topic. But it's cool!! http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif MY STEP DAD JUST GOT ME THE ULTIMATE X-MEN BOOK!!!!! http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif YAY!!! I'm sooo happy can't ya tell? Okay, I'd just thought I'd let you guys know, I'll shut up now.

My brother gave me that book also. I especially love the pic of Kitty and Lockheed on her bio pages!

I've got that book too. I love it. Where is Lockheed anyway? Did they just forget him again or is off with Kitty in character limbo? Ohhh...I hate that. Kitty needs to come back!! Now!!

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I just flipped though it for now, but one of the pics I had to look at was Kurt.

Now that I finally got off my lazy @ss and read this....NOT bad Moonbeam! http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

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Thanks! http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif More coming soon.

Okay, here is more of the story and what I've got so far of the dream. It's Rei's POV, Kurt's POV coming whenever Knight_Crawler sends it back to me. My blue fuzzy muse decided to leave me in a lurch for right now.....Oh yeah, I have also thought up a title for this story too. Oni Aman. It's Japanese, means Demon Lover. FEED BACK WANTED!! Enjoy.

It had been 45 minutes since Kurt had started rubbing Rei's back. For the past 20 minutes Rei had started to doze off. Kurt had enjoyed hearing her purr and making her laugh when he ran his hands down her rib cage. He stopped rubbing her back and snapped the cap back onto the tube of Icy Hot. He unclipped her hair and unwound it. Rei opened her eyes. "Nani? What are you doing?" "I'm done rubbing your back libeling, get some sleep." Kurt whispered. Rei nodded sleepily and whispered thank you. Kurt smiled, kissed her good night on the cheek and shut the door quietly behind him. Rei woke up long enough to slip back on the leotard that she wore under her uniform, a black spaghetti strap number, and took off the rest of her uniform. She then collapsed back into bed.

~ I slept wrapped up in a cocoon of warm blankets when I felt something nuzzling the edge of my ear. I made a sound of protest and snuggled deeper into the blankets. I then felt what ever it was nip my earlobe and pull slightly on it. "Well whoever it is, is very persistent." I thought. "Wonder who it is?" I let my sense of smell go cat and instantly knew it was Kurt. "Wake up libeling." he growls, as he rains kisses down my neck and onto my collarbone. "No." I mumble as I give a small smile. He knows damn good and well I'm just playing with him. "You can work to wake me up Kurt." I think to myself. I feel something cold drip onto me. I jerk awake and look down at my arm. It's honey. Cold honey. "Kurt that's cold." I yelp. "We can fix that." he says. He takes a hold of my arm and starts to lap up the honey with his warm tongue. I try and push him away, but all he does is trap my other hand in one of his and wrap his tail around me to keep me still. He licks my fingers, lightly sucking on them to make sure he gets all the honey off. You'd think that his tongue would be blue too but it's not. It's a light pink color and contrast nicely against all that blue fur. He sees me watching him and winks at me and smiles slightly, as his tongue flicks out to catch the last drop of honey from my fingers. Showoff. By now he's reached the center of my palm, which is very sensitive, and makes my hand twitch and spasm as he licks off the honey. "Kurt, what are you doing to me?" I whisper. "What does it feel like?" he asks, kissing me. " Like you wanna strip me naked, slather me with honey and lick it off." Kurt looked like he was seriously considering it. It was then that I realized that I had said that out loud. Uh oh?. Kurt them smiled his little demonic smile, the one that makes me melt, and he knows it. Damn. How the hell does he manage to look demonic and sexy all at once?

http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/eek.gif!!!
Things are really starting to heat up...!


BAMF!

Mmmm, honey and fur http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif Seriously, though -- I think my computer just melted. It's getting hot in here ...

-Rex

Opps. Sorry, Rex. Didn't mean for that to happen. Anyway, there is more. Honey, there is always more, where that came from. I just need to type it into my computer and then send it to Knight_Crawler for Kurt's POV.

Okay, here's more. I hope no one's computers, melt or anything. Enjoy.

"Sounds like fun." he says. Oh God what have I started? I 'm about to say something when he starts to kiss me again. "Something you wanted to say?" he asks, caressing me with his tail. "Not really." I say, focusing on his touch. "Just shut up and kiss me." I growl softly. He silently pulls me into his lap, so I strattle him. He picked up the bottle of honey with his tail. "I got a better idea." He starts to dibble honey along my neck with his fingers. The honey is still a little cold and I flinch slightly. He begins to nuzzle my throat with his lips and teeth, and I moan softly in pleasure and tilt my head back. He continues licking up the honey and bites my shoulder. "Ouch! No biting! Bad kitty!!" I say, as I swat him. "Bad kitty? Bad kitty??" he laughs. I nod. "Uh huh. Very. Bad. Kitty." I say, as I smear honey on his chest and push him onto his back. "Turn about is fair play." I whisper, as I stare into his eyes. I let my tongue go cat and start to lick the honey out of his fur. He laughs and tries to get out from under me. "Stop! That tickles." "That's the point." I say, leaving a damp trail of fur on the center of his chest. "Now stay still!" I say pinning both of his shoulders to the bed with my hands.

And oh yeah I want some help on this badly! I NEED a pet name that Kurt calls Rei. I got one for Kurt already. Please, please help.

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Fur and honey...I don't know. Seems that would be really sticky. I can imagine bits of fur stuck to everything by honey. What a mess! Just kidding, good work Beamy! Let's see maybe he can call her Sweetums, or Honeykat...I don't know, it's hard to come up with anything at this time.

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Grrr...I think my computer just melted too! That one was quite warm. Furballs are good...if that's how you're getting them...

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Honeykat? I like that. But the jury is still out. Okay, now all good things must come to an end. Yep it's the end of the dream. Unless you want another one somewhere in the story? Maybe? I don't know, I keep making computers melt, so maybe that's a bad idea.... One more translation. Aishiteru is Japanese for I love you.

I continued to lick off the honey and was in the middle of giving his stomach a bath, which is very hard because he started to laugh and that makes his stomach twitch when I heard, "That's it, I can't stand this." He started to pull on my upper arms and said "Rei." I looked up while still licking off the honey. "As much as? I love this? please?stop." I very slowly worked my way up his body. I could hear his ragged breathing and gave an evil smile. I looked down at him and tucked a lock of hair behind my ear. "But why?" I asked in an "innocent little girl" voice. "I thought you liked it." She continued. I almost laughed at the look he gave me. It was a look of "Of course I love it! But it makes me think of stuff I wanna do to you, and I really shouldn't." "And you know what Rei?" he asked, as he flipped me onto my back. "Revenge is a dish best served cold. Or at least at room temperature." He then coated me with honey and proceeded to get his own revenge.

Later on.

"Give up?" He asked, wrapping his arms around me. I nod sleepily. "Aishiteru my Oni Aman." I whisper, as I snuggle against his chest and fall asleep in his arms.~

Ya know I just had a scary visual when reading that last part. Instead of Kurt, I saw Winnie the Pooh.

The world needs a Winnie the Pooh slash fanfic site.

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~laughs~ WINNIE THE POOH?!?! WINNIE THE POOH???? ~Falls out of chair laughing.~ Oh god, that's kinky. Then again, who the hell am I to talk?

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by Spatula Gal:
Ya know I just had a scary visual when reading that last part. Instead of Kurt, I saw Winnie the Pooh.

The world needs a Winnie the Pooh slash fanfic site.

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I think there is one, but I'm not sure.

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by Spatula Gal:
Ya know I just had a scary visual when reading that last part. Instead of Kurt, I saw Winnie the Pooh.

The world needs a Winnie the Pooh slash fanfic site.

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I think there is one, but I'm not sure. Anyone else hear of anything like that?

Someone needs to write about that passionate night involving Pooh, Tigger and a pot of hunny. Then as a sequel, Eeyor and Piglet get it on. Whoohooo!!!

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