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My name is RalF Terrance Brock, I am 25 years old, and i am about to jump. I step up to the ledge, and peer down over it. The people down there that are hustleing around, scurrying to work, look about the size of a cat. I look into the office window accross the street, a lady is working at a desk. She looks up, startled, i smile and wave to her, no reason to be rude. I see her as she grabs the phone. I have an idea who she is calling. To give them credit, the police, and fire fighters get their quick, course the were only a few blocks away to begin with, i get lost in my thoughts for a moment. A voice reached up to me, and caught my attention, i could hear a helicopter approaching also, "i'll be famous yet" i think to myself.
I hear the voice on the megaphone telling me not to jump. I could listen to the voice, but i wont. As i reach a cross roads, i still think about her. All i wanted was Lori, but she only wanted Thomas, or Kenneth.
Her and Thomas had a thing goin, he wanted to tell me, he should have told me, but she said no, she didnt want to hurt me. Hell, i never had her phone number, or her address, yet they did. Yeah, maybe i was a little bit jealous, or maube i was getting the wrong signals, hell with her, it was hard telling sometimes. She wanted to be in control of her life every moment in time, hell i couldnt do anything unless she told me i could with anything about her. When i stopped to think about what i knew about her, it wasnt much. I knew what state she lived in, and what type of job she had, but that was it. I never know when i would chat or speak with her again, and i always told myself, that i wouldnt fall for her as bad as before, that i would finally get the hint that she never wanted to be with me, but everytime, i heard her voice, i fell just as hard for her again.
But now it will be different, not the first time i have been at these crossroads, but it will be the last time. No more crying on maryann, or chris's shoulders. no more reading ages old emails. No more stupid poems, or messages. Lori i think you might be proud, or glad now, i finally got the hint.
No more laughter, no more tears.
I look down again.
they cleared me a path, starting to set up a cushion.
cats i say to no one.
Lori, this ones for you, i think to myself, as i step off of the ledge.
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Why'd i do it?
i dunno, maybe the depression got to me, maybe it was the hopelessness. Maybe i disgusted myself to much. no big loss.
the next day, there was my picture in the paper, and my name on the news. The picture had the caption "why?".
like i said, no big loss.
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ah, FUCKING you will be mine!
G.O.L. 4 EVER
ALL I WANT IS TO COVET YOU;
YOU BELONG TO ME;
I WILL KILL YOU TO LOVE YOU
(love)
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[This message has been edited by SPYDERLUV (edited October 20, 2001).]
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so.....if you're writing and posting this.......and you saw your name in the paper........does that mean you survived the jump? http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/biggrin.gif
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RIP those who died senselessly 9-11-01
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Ralf,
Why do you post this shit here?
Is it to make people feel guilty or are you just venting?
Do you ever care what other people feel especially those you claim to care so much for?
Or are you always more concerned with your own wishes and dreams not relizing that you would harm others?
If you have a problem dont bring it here, its not fair to anyone including yourself.
HINT: use ICQ or yahoo
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"I say to our enemies: We are coming," said Sen. John McCain, R-Arizona. "God may have mercy on you, but we won't."
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hey pointy ears,
it is a FUCKING story. ok.
I post this shit here, because this board, and the board before it, are the places where i have always posted shit. If you dont like my feelings,words,stories, posts,questions. then leave. nobody said that you had to come here.
If my story disturbed you, or pissed you of, or made you smile, or even cry then good. It got a reaction from you the reader, and that was what i was hoping for, a reaction.
maybe the story had elements of real life, maybe they were all fictional.
you dont know that keneth, and you dontknow how i feel, but it is funny that you seem to think that you do.
like i said pup, you dontknow everything, even thou you think you do.
Do you ever care what other people feel especially those you claim to care so much for?...
uhm, should i? has lori ever really cared about me? you know pointy ears, it is very rude to talk about people, then not use their name.
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LET THE HATE RISE UP AND CONSUME US ALL...
I DONT DISCRIMINATE....
I HATE EVERYBODY
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DL, this is a catharsis, it's fictional, and it's a hellofalot better than the real deal. So why not read it, think "Ok, not bad" and move on.
Good story Spyder.
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Thank you suture.
but pointy ears, thinks he has to try and bust on my every move, since he thinks he knows what goes thru my head 24/7.
so his reaction to it, isnt surprising at all
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LET THE HATE RISE UP AND CONSUME US ALL...
I DONT DISCRIMINATE....
I HATE EVERYBODY
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Actually ive no clue what goes on in your warped head...and I couldnt give a rats ass...
LOL, though I do apologize if it was just a story. Its just a story is amazingly like some details that you have said yourself Spyder.
But then, those DO make the best stories.
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"I say to our enemies: We are coming," said Sen. John McCain, R-Arizona. "God may have mercy on you, but we won't."
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They say to write what you know. I mean as a writer and friend I had to read this twice. Once to read it, then once again to read it and imagine that I didn't know you. It's not bad, the ending needs worked on, it leaves too much of a hole. Did you die? Are you a ghost? Did you bounce when you hit the concrete? These things need to be clarified and pointed out to us, the curious.
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Hello. My name is Jack. Don't be afraid.
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Anime or cartoon style story would have him bounce or some other impossiable feat.
Or he would end up a nice red mark on the ground.
Either way, depends on the type of person you are.
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"I say to our enemies: We are coming," said Sen. John McCain, R-Arizona. "God may have mercy on you, but we won't."
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it is actually a work in progress.
a practice of sort to get back into the writing.
thank you for your critiqes
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LET THE HATE RISE UP AND CONSUME US ALL...
I DONT DISCRIMINATE....
I HATE EVERYBODY
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i wanna die in a story. lol but is suck at stories so... im scrued. lol. what this has to do wiht aneyhtign is beyond me
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G.O.L.
The next time you feel like complaning to your chaplain or your lover about how miserable your life is, be thankful you are not cursed with the three terrible karmas - Beauty, Riches and Fame.
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o yea and i love the story. Its got that though sense liek the i never was good at fidn placer and stuff. (i suck at using ht right words so i hope what im saying comes out right lol) but yea i liek the story http://www.hostboard.com/ubb/smile.gif
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G.O.L.
The next time you feel like complaning to your chaplain or your lover about how miserable your life is, be thankful you are not cursed with the three terrible karmas - Beauty, Riches and Fame.
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As a story, it's a good beginning (you said it was a work in progress). The ending needs work, that's what would wrap up what the story is trying say.
Good start.
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