Re: A Quiet Affair Part 5
King - this story, so far, is an absolute masterpiece in building suspense, building tension, then leaving your readers hanging on a thread on the edge of a cliff, wanting more! I honestly cannot remember the last time I read a story that did this so well and I am amazed how you have managed to build to the next level, going up several notches chapter by chapter. For me, this story hits every single button - two beautiful, physically identical and powerful women, with equally huge tits and clean shaven, dripping pussies, taking each other on, matching each other in every way, fighting out of shared hate and overwhelmed with mutual desire. Just fantastic work!
The mutual masturbation scene is fantastic, but you are leaving us in agony! On the one hand, I am delighted that there is still more to go and I'm looking forward to spending more time with Maggie and Amber; on the other hand, it's sheer agony having to wait some more (another week? Longer?) for a conclusion to this epic.
Obviously, the women have to keep on fighting to decide a winner. The only thing that will do is for them to scissor, to come together pussy to pussy, clit to clit, and settle their differences. Whoever ends up winning, I hope that you leave open the possibility of other battles between Maggie and Amber. You've got gold here.
Really great work! Please don't keep us waiting too long for the conclusion!
JB57
Re: A Quiet Affair Part 5
As rare as it happens, I'll have to disagree with JB. Arriving at chapter 5, I've reinforced my experience on why I scarcely, if ever write a sexfight, either because I can't shake the power dynamics of there being a dominant and a (forced) submissive, or because I can't maintain a conflict between people who're very attracted to each other.
Don't get me wrong, you're a very good writer... yet conflicts are built on motivation and a goal one or some of the participants wish to achieve. In order for me to suspend my disbelief, that these gorgeous ladies make love to each other, it ought to have been established that both are pansexual, bisexual, intersexual or gender fluid, anything non-binary really. The motivation presented are ideal for the catfight they had, as there were no signs of feeling attraction whatsoever, especially with the added element of an orgasm duel only feasible thanks to a prior lesbian engagement (otherwise the embarrassment and fear should have been described).
I don't think it's intentional, rather a bump in pacing the rhythm, courtesy of enjoying the story while creating it.
Re: A Quiet Affair Part 5
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catfightlover40
As rare as it happens, I'll have to disagree with JB. Arriving at chapter 5, I've reinforced my experience on why I scarcely, if ever write a sexfight, either because I can't shake the power dynamics of there being a dominant and a (forced) submissive, or because I can't maintain a conflict between people who're very attracted to each other.
Don't get me wrong, you're a very good writer... yet conflicts are built on motivation and a goal one or some of the participants wish to achieve. In order for me to suspend my disbelief, that these gorgeous ladies make love to each other, it ought to have been established that both are pansexual, bisexual, intersexual or gender fluid, anything non-binary really. The motivation presented are ideal for the catfight they had, as there were no signs of feeling attraction whatsoever, especially with the added element of an orgasm duel only feasible thanks to a prior lesbian engagement (otherwise the embarrassment and fear should have been described).
I don't think it's intentional, rather a bump in pacing the rhythm, courtesy of enjoying the story while creating it.
Dear Catfightlover,
I have to respectfully disagree. In the last chapter, King did establish that both women are bisexual and have both had past relationships with other women. They also were showing signs of mutual sexual attraction early in their fight (again, in the last chapter). By the time Chapter Four ends, the fact that they are hot for each other is the main reason that Amber flees the break room to find another place to fight. So, I think that King has met the criteria that you have presented. Am I misunderstanding your criticism?
Again, however, everyone is entitled to his/her own opinion on these kind of stories. I am thoroughly enjoying this tale but I would not presume to force my tastes on anyone else.
Take care,
JB57
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JB57
Dear Catfightlover,
I have to respectfully disagree. In the last chapter, King did establish that both women are bisexual and have both had past relationships with other women. They also were showing signs of mutual sexual attraction early in their fight (again, in the last chapter). By the time Chapter Four ends, the fact that they are hot for each other is the main reason that Amber flees the break room to find another place to fight. So, I think that King has met the criteria that you have presented. Am I misunderstanding your criticism?
Again, however, everyone is entitled to his/her own opinion on these kind of stories. I am thoroughly enjoying this tale but I would not presume to force my tastes on anyone else.
Take care,
JB57
I've read the previous chapter a few times, and it went to painstaking details in describing how they fight, which is something as a detail oriented writer I do support wholeheartedly, yet the part in question is but one sentence, followed up by the reinforcement that both know their way around ladies. If I only take bisexuality as a narrow standard, greats like Kinsey and Masters have established it's not a 50-50 business, so a single represented occasion is far from the merit of being fully competent, or for that matter, interested in the other duelist.
I'm not as foolish as to not be able to recognize it's written for people interested in women sexually, and it is a well written one, yet it still reinforces the expectation that a physical combat turns sexual. What it doesn't have is a quick assessment whether either of them have a type or what they may seek beyond physicality in a partner, they are just attracted to each other because both are sexy (although I thought punks are notorious for having Mohawks, maybe I'm just too old). Which is not how the story begun, I could picture all of them in flesh and blood, or rather, I could picture myself being in said library. What I had expected was a separate chapter before the fight about their daydreams of how they'd conquer the other sexually to establish both that their sexual spectrum is larger than usual and that they're selective, a sentiment alluded to by Maggie when she degraded Amber for being a pretty c*m dumpster in this chapter.
Re: A Quiet Affair Part 5
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catfightlover40
I've read the previous chapter a few times, and it went to painstaking details in describing how they fight, which is something as a detail oriented writer I do support wholeheartedly, yet the part in question is but one sentence, followed up by the reinforcement that both know their way around ladies. If I only take bisexuality as a narrow standard, greats like Kinsey and Masters have established it's not a 50-50 business, so a single represented occasion is far from the merit of being fully competent, or for that matter, interested in the other duelist.
I'm not as foolish as to not be able to recognize it's written for people interested in women sexually, and it is a well written one, yet it still reinforces the expectation that a physical combat turns sexual. What it doesn't have is a quick assessment whether either of them have a type or what they may seek beyond physicality in a partner, they are just attracted to each other because both are sexy (although I thought punks are notorious for having Mohawks, maybe I'm just too old). Which is not how the story begun, I could picture all of them in flesh and blood, or rather, I could picture myself being in said library. What I had expected was a separate chapter before the fight about their daydreams of how they'd conquer the other sexually to establish both that their sexual spectrum is larger than usual and that they're selective, a sentiment alluded to by Maggie when she degraded Amber for being a pretty c*m dumpster in this chapter.
Dear Catfight,
I've responded to your PM re: your larger concerns in a PM. Re: your message here: I feel that you are setting an incredibly high standard for this story. The idea of two women being attracted to each other because they are "sexy" is just a norm for this genre. Remember, this is a board about sex fighting; it is literally the point of the stories posted here. Perhaps the deeper dive into the psyches of the women would have added another dimension to the story, but it also takes time to write such things. Writers must be given the latitude to focus on what interests them, particularly given the limits of time and energy. In my view, this story has stood out as an extraordinarily good (especially in structure) example of the genre. King has already done a tremendous job of building suspense and ramping up the tension chapter by chapter. Expecting him to write another chapter to make the characters fit a particular dynamic of sexuality is expecting a great deal. As noted, he has established their bisexuality; their mutual attraction is not coming out of nowhere.
Take care,
JB57
Re: A Quiet Affair Part 5
I am not a frequent writer of comments here, but after reading this story I wanted to express my opinion as reader and as writer. I fully agree with JB57 opinion in his last comment. But I have to add, the writer wants as a not so secondary objective to arouse the reader, even to the point of masturbation and sexual release. Am I nor right?
Well, thank you King, this story, especially the last chapter when the girls "decide" their fight was sexual, was a piece of extremely arousing literature. I won't say at what level it got me, but honestly it was very high as many of JB stories are.
Thanks again
Re: A Quiet Affair Part 5
At the end of this chapter, they ask them selves - Who had won.
To me, any one who red this story - has won.
Love it that these two women hated one another at first. And now lust
for one another.
Both coming from two walks of life, to come together this hot way - cool.
Feel sorry for Wayne though.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
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I am a bit late to the party reading your story but i am glad i did. Your story is amazing, i love the mirror image of the girls bodies. A draw was super hot and hopefully we can read more about their duel . I hope that "poor Wayne " might can used for a BJ competition between the girls tongues and tits.
Re: A Quiet Affair Part 5
Both women now realize how even they are to one another. By their huge tits and curvy assess,
and now. How much masturbation they can both give and take - at this point that is.
Clash11 is right.
When Maggie and Amber are done fucking the shit out of each other and all is said and done, poor
Wayne shows up to find his two favorite women naked together.
One, do they thank him by what Clash11 said. Both women tit fucking him together and or with a two
woman blow job.
Or two, if there is a tie, do they blame him for every thing they just went though, having to blame some one.
Do they both sit on his face, or maybe smother him with their four huge tits.
I hope this story goes on and on, and yes - on.
Thank you Kingofdapirates.