Jumper

[Predator]

i wanna die in a story. lol but is suck at stories so... im scrued. lol. what this has to do wiht aneyhtign is beyond me

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G.O.L.
The next time you feel like complaning to your chaplain or your lover about how miserable your life is, be thankful you are not cursed with the three terrible karmas - Beauty, Riches and Fame.

[Predator]

o yea and i love the story. Its got that though sense liek the i never was good at fidn placer and stuff. (i suck at using ht right words so i hope what im saying comes out right lol) but yea i liek the story

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G.O.L.
The next time you feel like complaning to your chaplain or your lover about how miserable your life is, be thankful you are not cursed with the three terrible karmas - Beauty, Riches and Fame.

[Branflakes]

As a story, it's a good beginning (you said it was a work in progress). The ending needs work, that's what would wrap up what the story is trying say.

Good start.

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The ninja lesbian milk getter. aka dorkflakes.
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