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November 12th, 2000, 03:30 AM
#1
Dano
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How dare you sit there and tell me you understand?
How could you even fathom it?
You aren't even capable of beginning
to understand what I feel.
You simply aren't equipped.
Look at you; slim, soft, tan, beautiful
Look at me; hulking, broken, mis-shapen.
Fuck you and your 'understanding'.
Understand this;
You've helped me, more than either of us will ever know.
But you've also hurt me, sometimes I think
Beyond repair
This has done wonders;
It's opened my eyes
It's opened my heart
It's allowed me to re-connect
But it hasn't helped me hang on
You
Tempt me
Unknowingly.
How could you not know?
How could you possibly be unaware
Of the fact that you are desired?
Sure, it fades, like all emotions
You can't feel the same way all the time.
But it never leaves.
I'd never want it to.
But, I can't have both.
I can't have you and still have you.
This truly is one of those lose-lose situations I know you don't believe in,
But maybe you should start.
And one thing that burns
More than any of the rest of it
Is the knowledge that even if...
You still wouldn't.
After all, why be fair when you can have
Anyone?
[This message has been edited by Dano (edited November 11, 2000).]
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November 12th, 2000, 05:30 AM
#2
Inactive Member
dang Dano!!
if that had been directed at me i'd be reeling now. very powerful.
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November 12th, 2000, 02:48 PM
#3
Inactive Member
I don't know what to say....you always amaze me
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November 12th, 2000, 08:22 PM
#4
Inactive Member
Yeah, ditto what Tyl said. But also, I want to say that this work of yours surprised me. It seems very formulaic (to me) for something done by you. Having said that, it comes off wonderfully, and it reminds me of things meant to _look_ like theyre normal, but if you look close, you start to see all these weird, freaky, crazy differences. Then theres youre personal angle. I loved it! My fave line was this:
But it never leaves.
I'd never want it to.
Thats the way we work isnt it...?
I love it Dano, and keep up the good work!
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"What about him? What are you doing with him?"
"What you should be doing with me..."
Proud family member of Jelymo, gollum, Kelly, Dano, Jaxom27, 5Cats, Fenix and others.
I believe you can't appreciate real love until you've been burned
"Om Namaha Shivaya." ~ Dano
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November 16th, 2000, 03:22 AM
#5
Inactive Member
I like this because, to me, it reads like Henry Rollins. Which, I guess, isn't the best reason to like this, but there you go.
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November 16th, 2000, 07:00 AM
#6
Dano
Guest
And, in order to present the other side of the story, I give you the rebuttal, from my now ex-friend Ms.Ph.
I feel betrayed
I feel lied to
If you're not telling me the truth we weren't doing you any good anyway
I have chosen how I appear
I have taken control of my life and made it what I want it to be
I could choose to be a broken mess
Many things have happened in my world that you know nothing of
I have chosen to allow my pain to be released from me
I have decided to take care of myself mind, body, and spirit
For me this means working out regularly
Doing spiritual practice everyday
Expanding my mind in ways I didn't even know existed before
I could be a broken mess, but I choose not to be
I have immense pain from my past that you would not even guess
But I have chosen to transmute it, own it, and make it work for me
Not against me
I have been sad, depressed, overweight, and spiritually bankrupt before
Actually at several points in my life
But you know what I did?
I decided to ask myself if I wanted to stay there, or if I wanted to try
something else
I chose to try something else
I still choose to try something else
Everyday
I choose
Everyday
Don't try to tell me I've had it easy because you perceive me as beautiful
Don't try to tell me that I wouldn't understand
You don't even know
Everyday
I choose
Everyday
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November 17th, 2000, 12:38 AM
#7
Inactive Member
Hers is powerful. I like yours better. Here's to hoping that it gets better. 
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"What about him? What are you doing with him?"
"What you should be doing with me..."
Proud family member of Jelymo, gollum, Kelly, Dano, Jaxom27, Fenix and others.
I believe you can't appreciate real love until you've been burned
"Om Namaha Shivaya." ~ Dano
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November 17th, 2000, 01:34 AM
#8
Inactive Member
you know where i am. call me if you need to.
i like your poem though, and i feel stupid for missing it second time around.
*hugs*
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