a time to belong to

[machinery]

for my blood,
i doubt it comes.
these veins of mine
yearn this fall wind
and the rain is nice too.

precipitation reminds us
to be cleansed.

folks, i don't know where
your heart lies, but mine
belongs amongst the leaves.

as a child, i raked just to jump.
and when pops burnt the leaves
and i smelled nature's death,
i cried.

another fall is fading without
remembrance. i've got to pile
up the beauty of death
and embrace it.

[Hannibal]

Towards the end, you said "and" starting two lines in a row... just kind of hit me weird.

That whole stanza just didn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem.

It seemed forced. But I absolutely loved the ending, and the rest of the poem was very solid as well.

Nice word choice.

[machinery]

thanks for pointing out the "and" bit. The first appearance doesn't need to be there.

About that stanza...well, I wanted to reflect upon the time when the leaves were fun, not a hassle...so it is supposed to be a flashback, maybe if I offset the stanza or put it in italics...but i see what you are saying..

any suggestions?