Think

[Generalkaos]

This one is troublesome. It's far from finished.
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Here is a shape:
A circle crowded by miniature triangles who wheel,
spin, softly buzz
nip for silver blood from that circle?s edges, or

a square. broken on one side
crumbling with mathematical disease
not cancer, not uncontrolled growth
but trapezoids and smaller trapezoids falling, falling, or

an arrow.
bright and glowing salmon
sailing this way or that
seeming to sail that way because it points that way
or rises
or sails
as faces, other circles, watch from below
remarking on the grace of its chord
perhaps you or I are down there
reduced to simple sums of shapes
as if for the study of art.




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[Hannibal]

Now see... This one I really enjoyed.
Just the way it's all shapes... I dont know, i just really liked it
If you do revise it, post it again. I'd love to see a finished product even though I think this versions darn good.

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[Lunatic Fringe]

<font color=#006699>I'm not sure if you have salmon in there as a color or the fish, but I took it as the fish, to possibly go along with its "sailing" but that doesnt' quite fit in with the geometry of all the rest of it.

"a square. broken on one side
crumbling with mathematical disease"
I do absolutely love this line, however. For god's sakes and the rest of ours, keep that if you decide to revise & repost.
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"With a gun in your mouth, you only speak in vowels." - Jack, Fight Club

[This message has been edited by Lunatic Fringe (edited January 29, 2002).]

[Generalkaos]

I think that line's a keeper. I think there's a new stanza for this one, though. I'll stick it up here when it's farther along.

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Fetch me my blue fright wig, that I may be handsome when I unleash my wrath.