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  1. April 2nd, 2001, 04:30 AM #1
    Trevor Vincent
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    Fuck the ultimate goal
    That men and women strive for
    The snowy mountaintop
    That mere mortals cannot reach
    Perfection
    I don't reach for what's not there
    For I see your faults
    And fail to hide mine
    Even darkness sheds light
    When the moon and the stars
    Shine brightly above
    But I do not reach to touch
    The closest I will come
    Perfection
    Us
  2. April 2nd, 2001, 04:42 AM #2
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    i could see yourself talking through this one....a speech performed in the mirror so to say....to yourself....i like the start of the poem with "Fuck" puts emphasis on the work..like grabbing hold..and saying "Pay attention!" it got me......
  3. April 2nd, 2001, 09:09 AM #3
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    this is a good poem...very striking and kinda related me into some situation
  4. April 2nd, 2001, 08:07 PM #4
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    Well, I like this one...to say the least. I agree with machinery, that you know how to grip the reader and keep them interested in what your saying, saying 'Listen up, i have something to fucking say", you showed that, good job!
  5. April 2nd, 2001, 11:36 PM #5
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    FUCK yes...like what they said...i like how you opened with fuck-it means so much and evokes so many emotions, simply one of the best words in the language-your showing a great mastery of lanuage "even darkness sheds light" oohhh touching man
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