Sundown

[Trevor Vincent]

Spinning rooms and
Flashing lights
On this melancholy evening
Filled with the stench of liquid courage
Man's last chance to get some balls
And come out of the closet
In which they hide
A santuary of fear five days a week
But oh on those lovely nights
When the sky is right
And the moon shines bright
They come out to play
Shot glasses
And pitchers
Full of their dreams
They drink
To stand in lines and piss away
Now is the time
To gouge their eyes
And pull their hair
From five days of fear
As they dream dreams of death
But now they live
The smell of perfume
And nicotine invading their pores
Tellin the pituitary that the time is right
With balls in hand
And minds in dicks
Fuck is on their tongue
And ohhh - To those who fuck up
And step in their path to the bedroom
Now it's your time
Because tonight they're god
And bow down you must
To Zeuss himself
Whose only knowledge of Greek
Are the letters on his chest
As he pounds
But he forgets
To replace the moon with the sun
Lands him in his temple of feces and semen
Reaching towards the heavens
And with fear he prays

[machinery]

beautiful brutal and poetic of a weekend splurge.........very descriptive and analyzed very well.....nothing really else to say....i really took to it...it had a beat in my head...good work...real nice topic choice...keep it up.....and you're gonna rip at open mic night

[Hannibal]

wow *jaw drops* This was awesome. Really good. I loved it, everything about it, the images, the wording, everything. Just went really well. Congrats!

[Zeik Blaine]

WOW, is exactly what i was thinking. You captured it all, the perspectives of a good night out. All the descriptions were clear and i enjoyed reading this, Great job!

[ranter]

i really liked this one as well...at first i didnt wanna keep readint it, but i got dragged into it and i couldn't stop...it was well thought out and descriptive of a night out...you wait until friday to go out and drink, once you get drunk all you want is a quick fuck, and if your not getting that, all you wanna do it find someone to fight with...exactly man.

[Hannibal]

*giggles*