Suffocated

[Zeik Blaine]

suffocated
crushed by society's stones
bruised by reality's perfection
thoughtless as i dissappear
run away from the discouraging eye
dispare covers my thoughts

suffocated
my knees buckle from the weight
can't take a piss without a glimpse
the wind blowing the curtains rapidly
displays the clear, bright, outside life
but the bars of a higher order close me in

suffocated
broken glass is everywhere
looking into one sharp piece
i see the world i know
i am dissappointed with my life
close my eyes to the next day of suffocation

[Zeik Blaine]

I know its kinda choppy, but i was just thinking of how situations are right now, and I think it needs some work....

[Aurain]

Your poem is off to a great start! I hope to see the finish!

You sure did capture the struggle one goes through life.
*claps**snappers*