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[lost to be found]

The look in your eye
that drew me closer
to touching your lips
smoother and deeper!
But then you stopped
and turned your back
leaving me nothing
in return...
but lonesome memories
and a tear in my eye
all you said,
was "it isnt time".
WEll when is the time
that you'll come back
rescue me in your arms
somewhere to fall!

But there is no net below
there was a minute ago,
the security is gone
the gleem in your eye
it disappeared
without a trace of me,
and no hand to hold
so the passion is gone
and you are too!

[parch]

another good one..
wow...

the phrase, "somewhere to fall" caught me.. it put this picture in my head and i'm loving the rest of the poem...it was good anyway..but that made me take note

the exclamation points are good....they add something the reader wouldn't see..they add importance to points of the poem.
nice

___---parch