island

[tsilo]

The Island

If we are to be locked away in an island with no doorways,
And all the sirens that mock our distance
Are muting down into a fitful charade
The pleasure of my feet wrapped in his own sands
Could never last a ton
For your easy bone of warmth
Heaps sublimely within my hands
A massive heat than that of the sun?s
In pure steps, make no bitter rake of arrogance
Only, let me complicate (like a puzzle)
As I slope into your muscles
Seamless outline (precious stance!),
And when I drip by your sweat
Also, let your soul flee across to fascinate with mine
For even the wittiest sorceress could ache from her sour into the most devouring line
So tell me how I shall skip into this island of listless price
When I believe it?s been locked away into the sorceress? ill surmise?

[parch]

yeah
you sure do "complicate(like a puzzle)"
but its ok

you seem to change the meanings of words which i like the concept of but that doesn't mean it always works...its just a cool concept.
i like "seamless outline (precious stance!)"
--good line
and i like the line before it..
"as i slope into your muscles"

when you say "for your easy bone of warmth" i'm thinking of a penis cause honestly..isn't a penis that exact description...and the lines afterwards add more description to the penis if you see it that way..
prolly way off huh?
yeah, well, it doesn't have to be a penis, its just interesting that way. hope that doesn't offend you.


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SIDE NOTE

the board seems to be dying out a little as summer comes head on strong. i doubt there will be much posting this summer but you never know. i don't have reliable access to the internet even though i do get online maybe 3 times a week. a few weeks ago i had the administrators make machinery a new moderator for this board but he isn't listed at the top....although i think he is a moderator...not sure how it works...
but anyway..
i doubt he'll check the board that much, but i'll do my best. (right machine man?)
so hey everybody-- keep writing,....and Keep posting!
and invite friends or internet freaks you know to post....i love it when i see a new name on the board...

have a good summer


your friendly(asshole) moderator
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[tsilo]

yeah, i get eerie ideas that have different meanings all the time...i don't know if that is good or what...but the "easy bone of warmth" part is unintentionally created for the penis thing...it's simply the warmth of the closeness...great perception u had, hehe!! i don't know if anyone understands my poetry but do u?

[machinery]

tsilo, i really liked this...

when I look at your work, and read it...i have to really get in depth, and I find myself taking notes inside my heads...as for me...(and not parch, you bastard! hahah) I like the way you word things, using them in different concepts....it proposes a different image and makes the reader think differently..it's like you force me to think differently...a gentle force that is...but hey, i love it...but what i would like is a description of this poem...i want your side of it....

[tsilo]

well, alright...this poem is really about this admiration i have for 'someone' in reality that i cannot get so i produce this imagination of an island with that guy...and it's as though there are just no complications, no barriers between us in this island...cos..it's just so hard when u can't get what u want in reality ...makes me imagine things...and the sorceress is really 'me'...cos i'm sick in my head and insane to feel so much for such a fucking hopeless case...jeez...there...