prophecy

[Lunatic Fringe]

eyes straining in the night
dim light offered up by the clock
blazing 3:08

reflexive breathing audible over the
air conditioning
because you're listening

notice the scar below her ear
and the mole on her chest
the imperfection

bathe in her humanity
and relish in the uniquities
and feel incomplete when she's

gone

reminiscent of the yestertime
before she drifted into
your life

and wonder too
at the freedom of such attachment
unbound by verbilization

marvel at how it's finally
here
for you

<font color="#a62a2a" size="1">[ May 31, 2002 02:06 AM: Message edited by: Lunatic Fringe ]</font>

[SHATOUSHKA]

i don't think i need to post how i feel

[Lunatic Fringe]

I'm afraid I don't understand what you mean.

[rose]

first...what is that thing in the pic????

[Hannibal]

This is about masturbation!!!!!!

no.. i really liked this peice. It made whomever the peice was about very real to me. I could see this girl for what she was, imperfect, but it was okay. because that's good.. and I just liked this...

[rose]

first...what is that thing in the pic????

i like the use of "blazing" in the third line
and the beauty of the word "imperfection."

the spacing of gone (well the whole line before; "Incompleteness" perfect word for it)
back to the spacing...it fits of poem wonderfully.

the part with "freedom of such attachment unbound by verbalization" do u mean that u now have freedom because you found her..(your relationship)
or are u refering to the time without her when u were free and u liked it. can u explain the "unbound by verbalization"

i like the part about listening to her breathing. the word "reflextive" is a little confusing to me..do u mean mirrored...shes breathing the same as the airconditioner or shes breathing kinda slowly as if concentrating on her dream.

wow sorry for all this...its early...i think its all the green tea im drinking!
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[Lunatic Fringe]

The thing in the pic is a guy's head.

"freedom of such attatchment unbound by verbalization" refers to such a deep feeling that you dare not limit it by confining it within words like "love"...such as caring so deeply for someone that saying "i love you" cheapens it.

And I used the word "reflexive" to mean "by reflex"

And before anyone asks, I just made up the word "uniquitites"
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[Hannibal]

I wasn't gonna ask you conceited bastard.
So full of yourself, you and your head!

**wonders if rose even tried to see what it was in the pic...**

*thinks Rose is hitting on lunatic by probing his pic so much*