Death

[Cyalaytr]

?Death?

The embracement of skeletons

Demented?yet sad, very sad

All the colors become the same

In the rainbow of death

New moons cast above the horizon

A starry silhouette paints

The unlit sky

The stars have stopped falling

Silence? dead silence

Everything? everything in the universe

Seems to be dead

Now that we are no longer.

[Hannibal]

OH YEA.
I liked it!
Man, really creeped me out... like.. just thinking about it.. I painted this picture in my head, of another world...
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NICE! [img]graemlins/thumbs_up.gif[/img]

[SHATOUSHKA]

i agree. i liked this one too.
i liked the space skip between each line...
prolly helped add that suspended feeling.

[img]smile.gif[/img]

[Alex]

But when I skip spaces between my sentences, I get ridiculed for it.

[SHATOUSHKA]

had this been my forum, i would have deleted your
post immediately, alex.

and then i would have been ridiculed for that...


you hypocrite [img]graemlins/thumbs_down.gif[/img]

[Hannibal]

Alex, here you can do whatever you want... because poetry doesn't have confined lines, or anything like that... no holds barred ya know?
Unless your going for specific styles and what not...
i mean.. every poet/writer/thinker/whateveryouwannacall'em is different...
BUT, if your coming here just to start shit Alex... and say "i woulda been ridiculed.." i'll just put you on the banned list. Because although you're very dim-witted, and it's fun to pillage your weak little arguments so that everyone can see your simple stupidity, and predict what you'll say... it get's old.
So here.. this is your warning.
Anymore comments that are "poor alex, i'm so brow-beaten"....
And things will start happenin around here.
This board has taken a turn for the better Alex... don't ruin it for everyone.

[SHATOUSHKA]

i thought a long time about alex's post earlier
today.... weird... but anyways....

i realized that alex, indeed, came to start shit.
his post has no bearings on cya's poem... it
cannot even be construed as 'criticism' as it
is certainly far from being constructive.

no... instead... it was some damned post about
poor alex and his consistantly down-trodden,
hopelessly victimized life on hostboard.

and frankly, i find it INCREDIBLY RUDE that
alex seems to go from board to board to board
just to start more bullshit... boards that,
ironically, i post on. in addition to me, alex
has now chosen a board in which HANNY mods...
alex should know hanny from all sorts of various
bullshit including (but certainly not limited
to) the recent BS on gary's board.

in short, i'm frankly sick of the bullshit.

its highly rude to come here and post that
outlandish bullshit....

ESPECIALLY ON A THREAD THAT ISN'T DESIGNED FOR IT.

now... i would like to personally apologize to
both cya AND hanny for *sigh* again encouraging
the alex bullshit... as i know my post didn't
really help the situation.

but i agree with hanny... cya's posts on this
board has really been great... it took a lot
of effort to post his poems... as there are
quite a few.

i especially despise you, alex, for your one-man-vigilante showcase.

its in poor taste and bad form [img]graemlins/thumbs_down.gif[/img]

[SHATOUSHKA]

LMFAO! [img]tongue.gif[/img]

[crazy a]

Shatzy--That's an interesting poem there. I detect much anger in it. What societal aspect is it aimed at? [img]wink.gif[/img] [img]wink.gif[/img] [img]biggrin.gif[/img]

[Cyalaytr]

And they said my poetry would

Never cause out bursts of emotion

or anger

from people I don't even have a clue about

Well from me to you...

love me when I am here

for when i am gone you will

have nothing to anger yourself with


and shatzy and hanny :-) THX