Dreams

[Cyalaytr]

Dreams

I dream of the moon
I dream of the earth
I dream of death
I dream of birth

I dream of you
I dream of me
I dream of things
I wish could be

I dream a lot
and maybe that's bad
but dreaming makes me happy
whenever I feel sad

To dream is to live
and to live is to be
so without my dreams
I just wouldn't be me

<font color="#a62a2a" size="1">[ June 18, 2003 08:32 PM: Message edited by: Cyalaytr ]</font>

[Hannibal]

Short. It get's it's job done, point across.. but damn.. I WANT MORE!! It just leaves me wanting more stanza's about dreams...
I like it that much [img]biggrin.gif[/img]

[Cyalaytr]

that one could be expanded more... but like a cake that has already started baking... if I muck with it you know I would mess it up

[SHATOUSHKA]

i like it just the way it is.

except i'd remove both 'and's and the 'that'
from the first two stanzas.

[img]smile.gif[/img]

[Cyalaytr]

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><table border="0" width="90%" bgcolor="#333333" cellspacing="1" cellpadding="0"><tr><td width="100%"><table border="0" width="100%" cellspacing="0" cellpadding="2" bgcolor="#FF9900"><tr><td width="100%" bgcolor="#000002"><font size=2 face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by shatzy:
i like it just the way it is.

except i'd remove both 'and's and the 'that'
from the first two stanzas.

[img]smile.gif[/img] </font></td></tr></table></td></tr></table></BLOCKQUOTE>

HMMMMMMMm good idea... Done

[SHATOUSHKA]

great job!

(not that you listened to me.... but because
i can now really visualize the poem and read
it with out the added conjunctions/transitions)

well done [img]graemlins/thumbs_up.gif[/img]