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[ac_01]

Its alright. It needs more work. "All writing is rewriting" (or something like that)

I suggest you visit www.scriptsecrets.net - its a great place for tips on writing scripts. The important thing is you dont give up.... did i just say that!

[redlum]

Thanks for the scrennwriter link ac_01. There's a flourishing message board community linked to that site as well (*cough*).

[deanl]

Hey there.

I didnt say it stinks. Just that you should consider working in the Food Service industry.

As for the second lot of stuff you posted. I didnt even read it.

Despin out.

[ac_01]

scriptsecrets gives you a much more professional outlook on the whole writing process...its a great site and the tip of the day never disappoints....

[wahiba]

Thomas Crapper - it is terrible

Bleep outs and black spots might get it onto a comedy show on how the type of film some people like to make, because i certainly laughed.

Serious suggestion. Forget the daft words ( reserved for those who cannot think of anything better ) and get into comedy with acceptable words, and images. [img]smile.gif[/img]

[emjen]

you laughed at the '**** ' script?

hahha!

It wasnt really a serious attempt, its more the kind of 'lame' humour me and my friends have. So there indeed is a specific target audience. Maybe like 5 or 6 people.

Its always good to hear some positive feedback amongst the bad ones [img]smile.gif[/img]

About the 2nd convetsations between people, i tried to make them as natural as possible, looking from the characters who arent always serious about things and like to make jokes. I wanted it to be 'real' and to let the audience know a bit more about the characters, besides the fact they they do a certain type of 'fighting' for a living. Did i do that well?