Rape of American Dawn

[dwim]

Ok, this was partly inspired by the big news concerning Elian Gonzalez. The reason I disagreed was the way they went in and got them and I knew there was going to be a poem for it but I did not exactly know why. Then I saw the picture of the masked man with a gun in Elian's face. I thought "what a hell of a thing to wake up to..." then the poem came...
"Rape Of The American Dawn"

God don't want me to lie to you
I'll try to tell the truth the best I can
& yes, this is democracy
but it's not justice...

America knows all the charades &
she hides her face well
America hides behind 3 letters groups
CIA, ATF, FBI, INS
covering her face in shame
America knows all the truths &
she deal out stack of lies
despite the fact that
Statue of Liberty felt ashamed
she became a 2 face liar
& she wants to go back to Paris
& drink all the red wine there
dipped in croissants
finally free of non-existent promises
Let's give her a beret when
she goes back...
her words are no longer
true...

In the early morning rape of American dawn
I was driving on her roads while
an innocent boy stares down the gun
the mercenaries of the underhanded tactic
& abducted from a peaceful
existence into chaos & I am still
driving free & I
don't know whether to feel blessed
or want to trade ploaces with him
so he can drive free like I do
in my peaceful dawn of
trial mix & $.79 20 oz.
bottle of Coke
stuck behind a slow moving truck
to the sound of
hot jazz
pounding the road...

America - my lineage started with an immigrant
& it led me to be here
America - I can't keep my eyes or ears closed
& free of thoughts & opinions
America- I witness an unfair act committed in
the name of United States of America
America - should I declare myself an anarchist
tho I don't believe in total anarchy?
America - can I vote to be free of this
disgraceful act?
I want to shoot the t.v set of
celebration of horror injustice
but I'm transfixed by
your discontrol of
the freedom of the press
(Allah blessed the freedom of the press &
my freedom of speech & there's nothing
you can do about it!)
& I sit
transfixed, wishing
I was in his shoes &
he,
in my shoes
writing this poem
for me.
-April 21st, 2000

Not for a debate thread. That poem pretty much got what I was feeling out of me.

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There's loneliness in the radios...

[erisesoteric]

It makes me think about a topic that I've been avoiding thinking about, and in a new way...

And you can take THAT statement anyway you want to

It seems still rough, but the flow and rhythm are there. Shades of a tribute to Ginsburg, but you didn't let that rhythm trap you.

What can I say, I'm a sucker for political revolutionary fuck this messed up world poetry...

[This message has been edited by erisesoteric (edited April 23, 2000).]

[Branflakes]

Nice, dwim. Expresses your feelings well.

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The one Necro calls "brain".
Call me what you want, just don't call me Blue Falcon or Branni.
I walk the path, trying not get pulled into the weeds.
"See that star...the one shining brighter than all the others? I know the girl who hung it there."

[dwim]

Well, eri, Ginsberg did have some effect on my writing. Very influential Ginsberg was and that says a lot about his accomplishment as a poet.

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There's loneliness in the radios...

[erisesoteric]

I think it says a lot about your accomplishment as a poet that you were able to incorporate a tribute to him, but keep the strength of your own voice.

And after reading 15 thoughts, I'm always gonna shiver when I read your sig...

(hmm maybe that's why I don't listen to the radio unless someone else puts it on...)