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April 9th, 2001, 06:35 PM
#1
Inactive Member
another sign has past
and a month has deteriorated through
but once again
i have the bitter taste of you
for some reason
my mind, you have crept back in
my heart has dropped it's sheild
and turned to porcelain
and evrything i once knew
i knew becasue of you
everything i want to do
i want becasue of you
ewverything i feel to be true
i feel because of you
my body has lost
and like your flower, wilts
and though i felt your flood coming
i fail to put my heart on stilts
can you tell
what you mean to me
can you feel
what you are to me
and evreything i once knew
i knew because of you
everything i want to do
i want because of you
everything i feel to be true
i feel because of you
come to me again
and get on the same frequncy
i know your heart
is plagued with in consistency
i know you're confused
and will relate to yourself sometime
but until you discover yourself
i, you will not find
and everything i once knew
i knew because of you
everything i want to do
i want because of you
everything i feel to be true
i feel because of you
i know
i made the mistake
i know
i will stay awake
i know
i caused you pain
i know
i will wear the stain...
i know... i know... i know...
and everything i once knew
i knew because of you
everything i want to do
i want because of you
everything i feel to be true
i feel because of you...
its all becasue of you...
all because of you...
its you...
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April 9th, 2001, 08:00 PM
#2
Inactive Member
I LOVE this!! this has so much feeling in it. and i LOVED the way you used a little rhyme in it.. "my mind you have crept back in/my heart has dropped it's shield/and turned to porcelain"...truly amazing....
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April 9th, 2001, 09:00 PM
#3
Inactive Member
would could and should be an execellent singer, cuz you got the lyrics right here...along with others you have wrote....so fucking sing....sing it! its a beaut!.
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April 10th, 2001, 01:11 AM
#4
Inactive Member
liked it man.....it had that little verse scene thrown in there...the rhymes helps it flow nicely, but they arent so predominant whereas you become consumed by them (hopefully you werent intimated by spangly dan in making sure it rhymed, awful wankers) alright then....but anyways...yeah yeah, good good.
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April 11th, 2001, 12:57 AM
#5
Senior Hostboard Member
*giggles and grins* nice work, I did enjoy a good read my fairest of sirs.
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May 21st, 2001, 04:42 AM
#6
Inactive Member
beautiful. everything fit together. bravo.
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May 21st, 2001, 09:47 AM
#7
Inactive Member
can't say anything more...damn faceless...it flowed with your poem..hehe
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May 22nd, 2001, 03:57 PM
#8
HB Forum Owner
yeah
what they said
one more vote on the counter for ya
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